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Ruby - Challenge Response 7-d
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Ruby - Challenge Response 7-d |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Ruby She, accursed with red ruby lips That pout and purse at me in trust From which sweet words of love doth slip She, accursed with red ruby lips As she puts hands to slender hips And bids me love her as I must She, accursed with red ruby lips That pout and purse at me in trust. ~*~ A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines. To see the challenge, just click /pip/Forum7/HTML/000578.html [This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-30-2003 07:13 PM).] |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
K- How perfect! I must admit I peeked at this challenge...I chose Ruby as well. The triolet scared the heck out of me! And you know how I feel about sonnets right now! LOL Ruby is my birthstone...so I was thinking something along those lines- perhaps free verse. We shall see. I need you to crack the whip...hmmm, maybe you just did! Absolutely perfect write! Patricia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
How wonderful is this??!! WOW!! You really take on these challenges and do them so well. Love this!! ~Hugs YOU!~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
You go girl!!!! Ahhh sunshinygirl, you never cease to amaze me, yur lovely you know that? You write of Ruby so exceptionally. enjoyed. Maree  fate is not just |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Beautiful form , perfect triolet! You are amzing Karilea . . . I adore this form but it is hard to get those two lines just so You have done beautifully xxoo |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Just how perfect is this, Karilea? I have got to tru this triolet. It is just beautiful.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This was perfect in every way!! Susan C. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, this is so fantastic...I like this style, I might give it a go? (someday lol)  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...Beauiful! I took a peek at the challange..looks like you got inspired. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Seems appro that you chose Ruby and then penned a gem. Lovely write poetess K... nothing "simple" bout this rhyme   "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
GLOSSY Ruby lips too! This is just Gorgeous and full of femme fatale zing. Brava dear lady, you added to the theme and then some!  I'm loving these... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I love triolets. well done..wakes me want an apple? for some reason insanity is not a crime |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I enjoy triolets...well I love rhymes of all types well done, Karilea hugss M whoops I dropped off your l [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (07-31-2003 07:17 PM).] |
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