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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-07-30 10:01 AM



Hands mill moist dirt to quench deep hurt,
From the seams and the reams;
I plant new seed to replace each bleed
Of many a midnight dream.
From wings I have shaken thoughts that have taken
A bite of fresh sprung leaf,
Hands dig deep soil not a bother, nor toil,
As the sun shines sweet relief.
I weed the roots of bulbs and shoots,
And prepare the land down under,
And await cool rain to dispel disdain,
As the sky, she cries with thunder.

I sleep slight wink of eyes which blink,
'Tis my pillow adorned with fear;
Restless eve repeats until a new day greets
A seedling to appear.
A blooming sunflower in my garden bower
I reap what I have sown,
For thy restless night and worrisome plight,
Gave birth to a golden throne.
Now the noonday sun, thy work be done,
As twilight doth begin;  
And to sacred flower, growing taller each hour,
I retreat to dreams again.      
  

© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
wranx
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1 posted 2003-07-30 10:04 AM


Damn! I have to go to work right now...I'll be back to this.



SharaRose
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2 posted 2003-07-30 10:13 AM


It seems the flowers in your garden help you heal! Lovely to read.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2003-07-30 10:15 AM


Sue, you are one fine poetess! You are a remarkable writer!

I'm not just saying this, I am going back to read your illustrious words again!

Loveya!
Linda

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4 posted 2003-07-30 10:18 AM


See! I told you that I was going to read it again!--and yep, I deem it a !!!

I do believe that this may be my favorite poem of yours!


Linda

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5 posted 2003-07-30 10:25 AM


Sue, you are very talented, you know? This is
a very beautiful poem. I was going to highlight
a part, but I loved it all so much that I couldn't
pick out a favorite. I love the way you are rhyming
through the whole poem. It is so pretty,
I'm going to keep it, too. Hope you don't mind?  
Hugs  
Ethel

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-07-30 10:32 AM


Ed - thought you may like this . . .

Shara - they certainly do thank you

Linda - you are an angel!  So sweet - God, thank you so much

Ethel - of course I dont mind, I am honored
this was a part of my challenge
Vicky gave me PATIENCE to write of!

The first one I used alliteration, imagery, internal rhyme, personification and simile all at once.

Thank you so much
I like trying different forms
xxoo  

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7 posted 2003-07-30 01:07 PM


I'm in agreement about this being the best work of yours that I've read thus far.  Your use of language and symbolism is nothing short of professional, and the fascinating use of rhyme really drew my attention in and held my interest to the very end.  This is poetry at its finest.

quote:
And await cool rain to dispel disdain,
As the sky, she cries with thunder.


Those lines gave me a real smile.  You've got quite the imagination, my girl...  

Brian


Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

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8 posted 2003-07-30 01:10 PM



passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-07-30 01:13 PM


very deep, and the best one I've read from you yet...of course they are all excellent and they all touch my heart
littlewing
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10 posted 2003-07-30 01:43 PM


Brian, you are much too sweet to me
and for me to write something to go into your library makes me smile . . .
I look to you for guidance so often,
I am glad you enjoyed it
thank you
*smile*
xxoo

Dix, this one just popped out today,
it is all Vicky and Karen's fault,
and I thank you for such uplifting words for me
thank you

Thanks guys
xxoo  

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11 posted 2003-07-30 01:44 PM


I have to say as well that is by far the best of your work to date, and that is saying a lot Great work!

I don't want to know where I am going, it will ruin my journey.

Carpe' Diem        

inkedgoddess
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12 posted 2003-07-30 01:48 PM


A blooming sunflower in my garden bower
I reap what I have sown,
For thy restless night and worrisome plight,
Gave birth to a golden throne.
Now the noonday sun, thy work be done,
As twilight doth begin;  
And to sacred flower, growing taller each hour,
I retreat to dreams again.      

and when i scatter between them, i know i will be home again......
this is so so good, sue, and it speaks volumes to me right now

Aenimal
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13 posted 2003-07-30 01:48 PM


could be your best..just one question..could you tell me what is patience? Oh nevermind i'll look it up myself I'm in a hurry
littlewing
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14 posted 2003-07-30 02:23 PM


Sharon - Good God thank you so much . . .
I am humbled

Michele - I knew it would, I just knew it would thank you

Raph - like I know what patience is? ahahahah . . . that was
a good one up there
OK the only way I could describe it was waiting for a flower to bloom . . . lets see the actual definition goes:

(Merriam- Webster)

1.  bearing pain or trials calmly   HA
2.  not hasty AHA
3.  steadfast despite adversity AHAHA

(Sue's definition)

1.  sitting red-faced with boiling anger
2.  veins popping out of forehead
3.  being calm all day then flipping out
    and visiting your local liquor store

and thank you, it does mean a lot to me
xxoo

All of you have made me smile so much today!

Thanks guys
xxoo
  

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gemjop
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15 posted 2003-07-30 03:02 PM


Yep, think it may well be your best.

just had that serene beauty again, that you write so well. calming like a lullaby.

sigh. beyooooooootiful.

Susie, ya know where this is going....


brian sites
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16 posted 2003-07-30 08:05 PM


oh my....

Sue...

take a bow
this is
amazing
just
amazing

beatiful, you

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17 posted 2003-07-30 08:55 PM


I don't often tread here in Open, but LP directed me towards this...and I'm very glad he did. I was really taken by this poem, Sue...and every time I read it, I see more, so I keep reading it and reading it and...yeah. Think I'm going to do more of that. Thanks for the renewal.

  ~Carly

"How inimitably graceful children are in general before they learn to dance!"
           --Samuel Taylor Coleridge

jwesley
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18 posted 2003-07-30 09:38 PM


I will never tire reading you littlewing...

jwesley

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19 posted 2003-07-30 09:39 PM



I do believe,
I know
I feel
the importance of
a challenge...
and a belief.

THIS...so well done...so well wrung...
and so well writ.

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20 posted 2003-07-30 10:41 PM


I agree, you are reaching new heights in your work Sue. But you are just amazing that way--always a delightful surprise.

Gleeful hugs!

and speaking of patience, I have to go BE one tomorrow, but I'll be back around.

and with that, I'll tell you one of my famous corny jokes:

A guy goes into to see the doctor, saying:

"Doctor, doctor, you have to help me! I think I'm shrinking!"

The Doc replies with a shrug, "Well, you're just going to have to be a little patient."

GROAN...






wranx
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21 posted 2003-07-30 10:43 PM


yeah, WAITER! I'lluh have what the lady's havin'...and get her another, will ya?

Damn Susie, yer onto something!



Enchantress
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22 posted 2003-07-30 10:46 PM


LOL@Serenity!

Seriously Sue..you have reached new heights with this piece..
THIS is amazingly beautiful...perfection!!
A keeper for my library!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

angelblueyes
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23 posted 2003-07-30 10:48 PM


This is absolutely wonderful.One of your best yet.I always enjoy your writes, but this one is going in the library.
angelblueyes

littlewing
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24 posted 2003-07-31 10:15 AM


Gem - to the trash bin? LOL I am kidding - God thank you so much . . . Ilike to try different writes - you are much too sweet to me

Bri - you are so sweet *bowing* for once
thank you for making me smile always

Carly, coming from you and the fact that Brian sent you means a lot to me as the both of you are brilliant writers. Thank you for reading and I am truly honored
Thank you Brian

jwelesy - I sure hope so . . . heheh
thank you for your kind words

Hey Karilea - we are learning a lot these days huh?  Mann , thank you so much
Ilike that: so well writ lol
xxoo

K - thank you - you know you made me do this - or was it Vicky?  Either way one of you are in trouble and goodluck with your visit . . . hands clasped for you
thank you Karen - truly
xxoo

Ed - I am having a bout of challenges and I just cannot say no!  Is a good thing, stretches my brain . . . to new things
Thank you and umm btw - if your ordering - get another round please?
Thank you

Nancy - thank you so much, I sure hope so - I do try . . .

angel- thank you so much - from one wing to another . . . too sweet to me

Thanks guys
xxoo


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