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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2003-07-30 07:24 AM


From midst the darkness of sleep,
While sirens moan and skies weep,
Visions come from thought’s shadows,
And I’m walking beneath rainbows
With wet sand cool to my feet
The grit buffing smooth my toes.

Walking beside hand in hand
Warmer than the summer sand
Broad-rimmed hat shadows her face
Step by step the beach we pace,
Not to know or understand,
We walk fingers interlaced.

Red skies drip and she is gone,
The seas boil as I walk on
Sand turns to rock sharp as glass
Footprints drip as slowly pass
The trail hardens but goes on
Plunging to vivid darkness.

Screeching tires harsh echo
Visions lost in the shadow
Dreams return to sand once on
But now alone still she’s gone,
Skies hold inverted rainbow
Her smile with me in the sun.

Gloom


© Copyright 2003 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
cusick
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1 posted 2003-07-30 08:18 AM


I love the images you portray. ( Red skies drip and she is gone.)Will she come back I wonder.? Maggie
Kahlil
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2 posted 2003-07-30 08:25 AM


this is very sad...all but the rainbow smile..
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just out of reach
3 posted 2003-07-30 10:20 AM


Ah Professor, you have captured yearning and placed it on these pages of blue. Excellent. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet  

    

Sunnyone
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4 posted 2003-07-30 11:47 AM


No one can capture the thoughts as you can, and provide us with unexpected endings such as you did here!  There is always a touch of mystery and intrigue waiting in your words, and I enjoy the different paths that you lead us down!!  ~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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