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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2003-07-30 05:52 AM


there is a grey in the sky
a very strange kind of grey
so strange that I want to fly
through the little white hole
that pierces its way through
the foggy canvas

yes, I want to kiss you
even your picture would do
but I have been shut out
way out to the farthest point
almost like on the last planet
on our solar system

pushed away, pushed away

and my lips are sore
from cold winds that cut
their way to wade through
almost as if they want to show
who is boss, who is not

I am outside
waiting for acceptance
an invitation that would
let me be inside

anywhere inside would do, anywhere

for it would be most surely be
closer than the point I am away
from your shadow, your scent,
from you

or have you (gulp)
have you washed yourself
with that special shampoo
that wipes off memories
and sets dreams to square one

have you?


© Copyright 2003 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
ambrish
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1 posted 2003-07-30 05:55 AM


or have you (gulp)
have you washed yourself
with that special shampoo
that wipes off memories
and sets dreams to square one

have you?

a desparate cry to reach her

Sunnyone
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2 posted 2003-07-30 05:58 AM


It's so good to read you again!  And you captured me with this one, and most especially the 'special shampoo'....great thoughts here, my friend...~~S~~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

Ceinwyn
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3 posted 2003-07-30 06:08 AM


I keep on saying this..when I read your work this is just simply swoon worthy!!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

El_Campeador
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4 posted 2003-07-30 09:40 AM


It is great to read your poetry again, Sudhir. This poem is excellent, to say the least. I am adding this one to my library.

I would like to see you and Karilea do a duet together. Karilea already said that she was interested. I leave the rest to you...

~El Campeador

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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just out of reach
5 posted 2003-07-30 10:32 AM


There you are my smiling friend !  This write is awesome as usual. But...why so sad? Hope you are well & so good to read you again. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet  

    

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2003-07-30 10:39 AM


Sudhir  
Let me know what her answer is. LOL enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2003-07-30 10:53 AM


I must say, if she does have that kind of shampoo, I wouldn't mind borrowing some to keep on hand should I ever need to do some memory erasing!

Good to read your poetry again! Hope all is well with you, Sudhir!


Linda


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8 posted 2003-07-30 11:02 AM


Very nice to read your words once again Sudhir!
Enjoyed this...but please keep smiling.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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9 posted 2003-07-31 09:37 AM


Sudhir, I do believe you have read my mind
every single line
shut out . . .
brilliance
as always
xxoo

Martie
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10 posted 2003-07-31 10:28 AM


Sudhir....Hard to get in when you are shut out without a door.  Emotive writing, my friend...good to see you!
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
11 posted 2003-07-31 10:44 AM


darn..I know this one...and every time I read a stanza and thought it my favorite another one followed


M

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2003-07-31 11:25 AM


when answers are buried in silence all one can do is guess.... and keep asking, I guess

Thank you all so very much. You are all way too kind...

regards to each of you and more,
Sudhir

inkedgoddess
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13 posted 2003-07-31 10:39 PM


have you?

yes, sweetheart, she has......move away from this one...you're too cute to cry

angelblueyes
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14 posted 2003-08-01 12:06 PM


This was very good.I look forward to reading more from you.
angelblueyes

Sudhir Iyer
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15 posted 2003-08-01 07:03 AM


Thanks a lot, both of you...

regards
sudhir
P.S... Michele, I am trying hard...

vandana
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16 posted 2003-08-01 05:35 PM


enjoyed
Sudhir Iyer
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17 posted 2003-08-04 10:43 AM


Thanks a lot, Vandana...

regards
sudhir

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