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jellybeans
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0 posted 2003-07-29 12:49 PM


huddled in false security
it had no intentions
of being discovered but
with a gleam and a
practiced flip it was
uncovered

naked and shivering
it sought refuge with
another
and another

overcrowding forced
it out into the open
for guilt and shame
now occupied its
sanctuary

peace demanded
a death sentence as
the author of deceit
distorted the truth

will set you free

a lie is no excuse
for pardon

with chaos crowned
and all subjects dutifully
paying homage the instigator
left to find another
to uncover

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (07-29-2003 02:27 PM).]

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Local Rebel
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1 posted 2003-07-29 02:17 PM


did anybody ever tell you you write really well when you're indignant?

(leaving before something hits me)

jellybeans
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2 posted 2003-07-29 02:26 PM


well since you left lol (and I missed) I will say yeppers...a hot temper always seems to feed my muse's fire...not sure about the 'really well', but my muse and I say thank you *smile*
Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-07-29 02:42 PM


a lie is no excuse
for pardon

~*~

Smiling...

ducking.

jellybeans
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4 posted 2003-07-29 02:48 PM


well lol, I'd get angry more and post it if I knew I was gonna get so many smiles out of it.....well...lol, maybe not.....I'd rather just smile....thanks sunshine....quick ducking...you guys are lucky I can't throw to save my life *grin*
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5 posted 2003-07-29 03:36 PM


overcrowding forced
it out into the open
for guilt and shame
now occupied its
sanctuary

Now how am I supposed to give a poem the sincere appreciation it deserves when I'm giggling and ducking (and being grateful you couldn't hit the side of a barn? *G*)

I like this very much, Lovey... your muse funnels indignation very well. *S*

Patricia
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6 posted 2003-07-29 07:37 PM


I am better this moment for having read this as I take an honest look at someone in my life.

Thank you.  
Patricia

PS Jellybean was my daughter's nickname as a little one...now I just call her "bean" for short.  

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7 posted 2003-07-29 11:53 PM


That's the way, all right....no doubt about it!

But don't give up, for every hundred or so dirtbags, there's at least one good one.....

....and I'm with the Reb on this one -- you write a really good mad! I will ardently attempt to stay on your good side...

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nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2003-07-31 08:59 PM


I wish I could write like this and not be so obvious with my words.

Very nice

M

Bill Charles
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9 posted 2003-07-31 09:06 PM


jellybeans - a lot to be read in this message you write. Nicely written...

BC

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