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Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2003-07-28 05:41 PM

Stir

I am a shadow drowning
in the flow of your eyes
struggling to stay afloat
the golden ripples
of your gaze
indifferent

gently I wavered like a leaf
into your green beginning
becoming light burning
with life
a sudden burst of orange

but

through the rush of your fleeting
all dry and fleeing like Autumn
my glistening happened
to blacken

and I

faced the darkness of wintered
days without you beloved
and without you
in this blur of life
I will stir
the flow of your eyes

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2003-07-28 05:47 PM

Maree

You do stir the flow with this poem. Lovely and aching.

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

2 posted 2003-07-28 05:47 PM

faced the darkness of wintered
days without you beloved
and without you
in this blur of life
I will stir
the flow of your eyes

Whoah...this reached down into my soul. Incredible images in a wonderful flow of words.

Still shaking my head in awe!

Patricia

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2003-07-28 06:07 PM

Yep! 100% DarkAngel...

Read this in the archives, loved it then, love it now.

Glad you posted it once more.

Ed

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-07-28 06:52 PM

I just wanted everyone
to hush...
and listen...

wow...

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2003-07-28 08:38 PM

Put down the paintbrushes pick up the pen. Look at the impact of your words. We miss them though the reposts will tied us over we're beggin for more.

Gabriel Frost
Member

since 2002-08-15

Posts 216
Between midnight thoughts

6 posted 2003-07-28 08:45 PM

I wish i just wake up one day and someone writes this kinda stuff for me! lol. great work, i have a similar piece entitled, knock knock. i'll probably post it soon

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2003-07-28 10:26 PM

This is an awesome write. I read it twice and now I am putting it into my library. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

8 posted 2003-07-29 12:26 PM

I want to see more of you, hear more of you here....your worth is beyond rubies, and your work is a blessing to this group.

More.

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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

9 posted 2003-07-29 12:29 PM

How is it that your words can stir the blur in my eye and cause tears to flow?
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2003-07-29 12:33 PM

A very stirring write. Eloquent, expressive and memorable!

EA

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2003-07-29 04:05 AM

awesome!

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2003-07-29 03:55 PM

ahhh Maree . . . I love the way you write
like whispering words from my own mouth
You are brilliant . . .
xxoo

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2003-07-29 06:12 PM

Hi there Martie, thank you my friend, I like to stir the flow heh.

Hi Patricia, thank you so much I'm shaking my head in awe that you're in awe. Thanks so much for popping in to have a read.

Hallo Sir Ed

100% DakAngel eh? it's the only way to go and be. Thank you m'friend

Hey Sunshinygirl, are my "Wow's" rubbing off on you heh. Thank you for the "hush" and "listen" You're da best.

Sir Raph, hmmmm begging ey? I like it when you beg

Thank you for your lervely words m'friend.

Gabriel Frost, thank yo for your lovely reply. I'll definately keep an eye out for your poem "knock knock"

Chris, Hi and thank you so much and for adding me into your library.

hey Ed, does that mean I'm a diamond? Thank you for your lovely words I am truly touched.

Hey Lynne, rememeber that night when we met at the casino in Melbourne, where you thought my friend was me? We had a good time didn't we? We must meet up again when I'm down next time ok? or if and when you come up here. Sorry to have brought tears to your eyes hon. hugs
Thank you.

EA, thank you so much for your lovely reply.

PS, thanks for the Awesome

Ahhh Sue, thank you for the brilliant I'm truly humbled I am and blushing heh.

Thank you all for stopping by to read, I hope you know just how much I appreciate you taking the time and your wonderful replies.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

14 posted 2003-07-30 03:37 PM

Stirred completely

wow Maree, this is, just, have no words.

Library? yes library.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

15 posted 2003-07-30 03:45 PM

yes yes..im with everyone else..my emotions and thoughts stirred by this..amazing piece...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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