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Fear.......... Littlewings Challenge
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Fear.......... Littlewings Challenge |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Brewed cold, at the thought of the linger of this believing I had outstretched the nightmare over slept time My choice involved, neither heads or tails it was never that pretty, that easy Cold spot coincidence where I stand alone I know the bricks fit There should be no breeze upon my neck Swarmed hourly, someone has varnished my skin my heat remains, under layer of bold that is wearing pit stomach black thin When will you leave me to shiver on my own, on my own It never improves, with time nor reason only deepens the crack to feeling reckless erosion with every tear I cannot suppress I fear, I will always regress. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
OHHHH Gem!!!! This is amazing!!! God . . . It never improves, with time nor reason only deepens the crack to feeling reckless erosion with every tear I cannot suppress I fear, I will always regress. The worst fear of them all to never move forward! Oh, you are brilliant Thank you This is one of your best indeed xxoo |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I like the phrases in this, And although I’m not sure of what the challenge was Enjoyed the brooding nature. Inspirationally good . Brewed cold, at the thought of the linger of this believing I had outstretched the nightmare over slept time. Dry ice bold Burns my finger with a hiss Relieving in pain my dreams despair In echoing rhyme. My choice involved, neither heads or tails it was never that pretty, that easy. The blur of numbered wheel impales My mind and stomach go queasy. Cold spot coincidence where I stand alone I know the bricks fit There should be no breeze upon my neck. I sweat profusely frozen to the bone The shakes won’t quit As the burning shatters all my self respect Swarmed hourly, someone has varnished my skin my heat remains, under layer of bold that is wearing pit stomach black thin I exist minute to minute and there within My soul in heat body in cold All consumed by this nightmare I’m within When will you leave me to shiver on my own, on my own Let die my heart’s pale quiver Left alone, left alone It never improves, with time nor reason only deepens the crack to feeling reckless erosion with every tear I cannot suppress I fear, I will always regress. . There is no good time or best season Into the depths I go falling Worn away all remnants of happiness In fear, living wastes in regress hope you don’t mind me taking liberties with your poem Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (07-28-2003 03:04 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
where would we be now, this day without the bittersweetness in life? Gem..you are astounding...your writes are truely penetrating..pulling the reader in to understand the value and the hidden positive lessons in all of your writes...thank you...always |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I fear, I will always regress. I 2 |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
dunno if ya take this as a compliment..but ya sounded like me..with some if the lines. like YOU read MY mind  . When will you leave me to shiver on my own, on my own (lol..did ya take that outa my brain? yanno shiver is one of my favorite words...) fear...you do give me the shivers girl... You are my poetic hero!  insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (07-28-2003 03:57 PM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
SUE It is isn't it. Frightens the heck out of me very day, every second actually. Thankyou for such a compliment. And thankyou for the challenge. It excorcised some demons. xxx GLOOM Wow. I don't mind at all. Almost like a duet, without all the hard work.  This will be a reply i treasure most. xxx LEE J *speechless* Thankyou as always for understanding me. xxx RAPH me three. hugs you ho. xxx LIZ Yes, very much so a compliment. He heeeeeee. knew i could read you one day!or am i just copying you? copycat. meow. thankyou dizzy miss lizzy for the inspiration. xxx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
No thank you Gem . . . yes very true indeed I often feel like I am on an escalator . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-29-2003 02:24 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn, do I know this or what? |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'm the litte forum cop, come to bump this to the top insanity is not a crime |
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