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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-07-27 06:29 PM


Why the Triangles

Open Mouth

!
Mo
thers
Fathers
& Children


Triangles

Mother loves father
Father loves children
Children love parents
Mother loves children
Father loves mother

Children step back

There is love and there is
Love

There are cookies and there are
Cookies

Warm milk and cold milk

Acceptance and accept
Me

I am different
And do not know your differences
For you have led a life I know nothing of;
But you know all of me.

Osmosis doesn’t work
Child to parent

Only parent to child

For you have seen all of me; I have seen less of you;
And less of you is seen by me if you
Carry on with only you.

You know stories I do not know;
Holding secrets to protect ~
But what happens
If the secrets bleed and contaminate
And lend themselves
To
My child?

Talk to me.  
Tell me what I need to know
Before it is
Beyond the grave.

Do not be ashamed,
Truth will come to light
Although
At whose cost?

Lend to me the skirts of your love
And the shirt of travail

Let the thought of child open your mouth
So the child might open theirs
To knowledge

And

Understanding.

Only then
Will forgiveness
Begin

Triangles

Open mouth
Tell what you can
In the stories of our fabric and then,

Then

Will we understand
Comprehend
Know

the
Why.




[This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-28-2003 09:09 AM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2003-07-27 07:34 PM


Karilea...It is important to pass on stories...I think sometimes we think it's not important, but it is a thread that helps stitch one generation to next...as is poetry.
littlewing
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2 posted 2003-07-27 07:38 PM


Karilea:

this alone brought tears to my eyes
what beautiful writing
!
Mo
thers
Fathers
& Children

xxoo

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3 posted 2003-07-27 07:45 PM


"For you have seen all of me; I have seen less of you." ---that line just popped out at me, as I have often found that to be the scenario in my own life.

"Osmosis doesn't work"--open communication does.

A full-bodied write with layers of meaning.

Warm hugs,
Linda

Tim
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4 posted 2003-07-27 10:40 PM


one we are
we are one
mother daughter
father son
family
one apart
yet all together
of one heart.

what I consider a self-introspection poem, nicely done my slighty northern friend.

Patricia
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5 posted 2003-07-28 07:29 AM


Acceptance and accept
Me

Yes...this is truly a wonderful piece of writing.  I have never know my own parents as they would never share themselves with their children.  I never felt accepted.  Now there is someone in my life (I don't know how long he will be...as you know) but each time I see him he tells me, "the two most important words in the English language are forgiveness and acceptance."  I question his philosophies in other areas...this one I do not.  For from forgiveness and acceptance, love may grow.

Sorry for the lengthy response...you took my thoughts on a cruise!

Patricia

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6 posted 2003-07-28 09:00 AM


Wow, I'm speechless after reading this...

the style, the words..powerful stuff.

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7 posted 2003-07-28 09:41 AM


this is so beautiful...

insanity is not a crime

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8 posted 2003-07-28 09:49 AM


For you have seen all of me; I have seen less of you;
And less of you is seen by me if you
Carry on with only you.

You know stories I do not know;
Holding secrets to protect ~
But what happens
If the secrets bleed and contaminate
And lend themselves
To
My child?

Talk to me.  
Tell me what I need to know
Before it is
Beyond the grave.


Karilea,  this is very touching to me.  
Hugs  
Ethel


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9 posted 2003-07-28 10:04 AM


It made me feel intrigued.
Dark Angel
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10 posted 2003-07-28 07:39 PM


This is absolutely beautiful Sunshinygirl. I love the format too.

A most touching write dear lady.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


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11 posted 2003-07-29 07:18 AM


Your creative touch always floors me!
Eric

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12 posted 2003-07-30 03:33 AM


I really like this, it made me think about families.
Sunnyone
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13 posted 2003-07-30 05:11 AM


Karilea, this gave me warm thoughts and happy feelings.....you have a way of making my morning reading very satisfying!  I lift my cup to toast a work well done, my sun-sis!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

ambrish
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14 posted 2003-07-30 05:49 AM


a great writing
a peculiar style

QjQ
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15 posted 2003-07-30 07:06 AM


very good thoughts expressed,,

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16 posted 2003-07-30 07:23 AM


YOU...

oh this...THIS:

"For you have seen all of me; I have seen less of you;
And less of you is seen by me if you
Carry on with only you."

I COULD quibble yanno--there's still mysterious sides to MY mom too, but oh, hugging you for this.

Thank you.



shaking my head here lady...

you are wringing them out these days.

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