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Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!

0 posted 2003-07-27 01:13 PM



I Am

I am sleeping, I am dreaming
I wonder if I'll ever wake
There is no light at the end of my tunnel
Oh God, how I want to awake
I am sleeping, I am dreaming

I pretend to be alive as I walk through this world
I feel all eyes burning upon my skin
I touch my thoughts with only but a scream
I worry that someone may one day see through this cracked facade
I cry for the lost souls who wonder whom they are
I am sleeping, I am dreaming

I have come to understand I shall always slumber
And I say life is hard, never gives, only takes
I do still dream though, of finding my destiny
I try to see things the way they should be
God, I hope this is over soon
I am sleeping, I am dreaming


**note- this isn't "truly" from experience although parts are derived from lessons learned.


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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2003-07-27 03:10 PM


A good write:

but if you are married and sound very happy why so many negatives in this when it is supposed to be who you are?

Just curious:

I am sleeping, I am dreaming
I wonder if I'll ever wake
There is no light at the end of my tunnel
Oh God, how I want to awake

And I say life is hard, never gives, only takes
I do still dream though, of finding my destiny
I try to see things the way they should be
God, I hope this is over soon


Do you understand what I am  saying?
...I guess the grass always looks greener...but truthfully it isn't
Take it from one who has seen it tried.

M

littlewing
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2 posted 2003-07-27 03:41 PM


Jeff - nice job
well met indeed

I pretend to be alive as I walk through this world

yes, we all do
xxoo

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2003-07-27 08:46 PM


You may be a dreamer, but you are not a sleeper!

May you find your destiny, and enjoy the ride!


EA

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2003-07-27 09:45 PM


Ah...found this little gem and wanted to say...You ARE our dreams and our dreamer...a little of all of us.
Excellent write. Enjoyed the meter and well thought words very much. TD

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