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Mire and Muck
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Mire and Muck |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri 
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Mire and Muck I shall toss a coin in final plea As I find no daisy to pluck In crystal’s clouds, I can not see So, I’m held between mire and muck Perhaps I’ll pick a card, any card And play upon draw of my luck But then which card shall I discard Still I’m left between mire and muck Consults with tellers, scopes, and such Have left not a chord to be struck With no fortune told in his touch Still I’m fixed between mire and muck Gold coin now falls within my hand But it upon the shelf I tuck With hopes that grains of hourglass sand Will free me from this mire and muck |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Patricia - enjoyed this write of mire and muck. At times still I feel as if I'm there, but have been slowly climbing out of the mire and muckyness... BC |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Patricia I'm somewhere between ire and luck myself, LOL wonderful write. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
ooo, this is good and gooey! I think I'm there, too. Let me know if you find a way out. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I like the way you tie this together, the rhyme scheme and the imagery each making an envelope to hold it.... and the fact that you've written a feeling I have every day, until I'm too numb to write it myself. Like that very much.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, very much what Ed said!  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I'm sending you some more gold coins! No more mire and muck for you, Dear One!  Terrific poem!  Linda |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Patricia... methinks we all know this limbo where there's no place to go. *S* |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Excellent write, and so true, so true! Rf |
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Poe_Pot_Pie Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 107Canada |
I enjoyed the part about cards! Awesome as always!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Patricia~ Interesting rhyme scheme and subject~ Rhyming flows easiest for me and I enjoy reading when it flows for others~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Gold coin now falls within my hand But it upon the shelf I tuck With hopes that grains of hourglass sand Will free me from this mire and muck An absolutely wonderful read Patricia, as always  Maree. fate is not just |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Patricia, I can relate, but you knew that already |
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VOE Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 119From the land of Camelot |
Scoot over......you're not alone, you know!! I've got on my hip-waders, but I'm still sinking in. Great write, and just how I feel, too...~V~ I speak from the Voice Of Experience |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write n read,,  |
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