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Wind
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0 posted 2003-07-26 04:05 PM



Whisper through the night so cold,
     tonight is black, tomorrow’s gold
          I’ll wait until the morning breaks,
               and stand here while the surface quakes

            You always shiver, never burn,
         you make mistakes but never learn
      It’s time you saw the world in white,
   embrace this place without a fight,

    I still don't see what holds you down,
         what turns your eyes from blue to brown
              I'll take you somewhere else someday,
                   Away from trouble and dismay

            Gravity will always win,
         but splendor’s hidden in your skin,
      Tonight is black, tomorrow’s gold
   it’s time for you to break the mold

(much much better. Splendor wasn't as hard as happiness...)


[This message has been edited by Wind (07-26-2003 04:20 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-07-26 04:09 PM


Fantastic write Liz!!
I love this!!!  A keeper for my library.  
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

[This message has been edited by Enchantress (07-26-2003 11:28 PM).]

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2 posted 2003-07-26 04:09 PM


Splendiferous! Mellifluous! Lyrical!

Much enjoyed l'il darlin'!


EA

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3 posted 2003-07-26 04:12 PM


thanke        
                                  ...<>...^.*...........*....*.*.*...^.*.......*.                                                 .*...
.*<>....*                *...<>*......                      ^...^.....**..........**        ^***           ^***<>....        .... ...**..<>..*..         .<> ............           ....^**.........                        ...............            ......  * *    *   *<> .^...    .......  . ... ... ...*...*     <>..^..
..............      ....   <>..           . . . .....   ...
...<>..^....* ...... (this has no point )     ....*  ......^...* * * ..**<> .........       .... ** ....<>....* * .....*  *  .......* <> **        .....        ....    ......        ......*....
.....*........      *****   ......*....<>........ <>     <><>*    .....          ...............   ***    ..........*.......  <>        .......<>.*


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littlewing
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4 posted 2003-07-26 04:35 PM


BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LIZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

wooo - hoooo
BRAVO BRAVO
*tossing roses*

This is awesome!
I knew you had some happy in there
*wink*
really, this is amazing
thank you
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (07-26-2003 04:36 PM).]

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5 posted 2003-07-26 11:17 PM


Liz, this is an awesome write. I love the way
you formatted it, too.
Hugs  
Ethel

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-07-27 01:55 AM


back to breathe . . .
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7 posted 2003-07-27 01:59 AM



Great job on this, Liz...I like...yes I do!
Hugs,
~Vicky

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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8 posted 2003-07-27 03:06 AM


Liz, OMG! This is an awesome piece! I just knew you had it in you and I'm glad you let it out!

into my library!

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9 posted 2003-07-27 10:03 AM


Ah, yes, beautiful form and rhyme. I love this one Wind !! hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet  

    

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10 posted 2003-07-27 10:17 AM


I do believe
we have a winner....

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11 posted 2003-07-27 02:41 PM


Thanks guys...this wasn't blindingly happy, so I liked it. I'm glad you guys did too
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12 posted 2003-07-27 04:04 PM


you are a terrific poet,,,,dont ever stop
windygirl

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13 posted 2003-07-27 04:20 PM


Wind

"Gravity will always win,
         but splendor’s hidden in your skin,
      Tonight is black, tomorrow’s gold
   it’s time for you to break the mold"

Sweet!!

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14 posted 2003-07-27 05:00 PM


Great writing Liz could be one of your best, least its one of my favourites
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15 posted 2003-07-27 05:29 PM


lol..what are ya guys saying? ya want me to be hopefull from now on? I shall try
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16 posted 2003-07-27 06:01 PM


This one is really good, Liz. I would have to agree with Aenimal, and say it is one of your best.

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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17 posted 2003-07-27 06:22 PM


haha..didn't notice that I passed the number line..
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18 posted 2003-07-27 07:26 PM


nice
gemjop
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19 posted 2003-07-27 08:16 PM


this cheered me up. yep, one of ya best m friend.

I, however, still feel like this

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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