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I Am (K's Challenge) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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I am all or nothing I wonder how gOD sleeps at night I hear the echoes of a past that haunts I see through the facade and I want no more of it I am all or nothing I pretend to die at night I feel the weight of SELF I touch the wounds to see if I still feel I worry I'll never know l*ve again I am all or nothing I understand little of this place I say too much or not enough I dream that She(?) will come I try to try I hope beyond my means I am all or nothing |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah, there's that four letter word *s* all or nothing...hard to handle sometimes for sure, for some people |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I understand little of this place I say too much or not enough wish I had written that |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I hear the echoes of a past that haunts I see through the facade and I want no more of it I am all or nothing" "I touch the wounds to see if I still feel" excellent write Raph... and nice pic  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I pretend to die at night I feel the weight of SELF I touch the wounds to see if I still feel I worry I'll never know l*ve again I am all or nothing =============================== I was hoping you would do one of these... I knew it would be honest and that it would touch places deep... I was right. thanks for sharing you with us. "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I dream that She(?) will come I try to try I hope beyond my means I am all or nothing Raphey,   This is really good. Thanks for sharing your heart with us.  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jesus Raph, this is the most honest and provoking write I have seen from you. I am all or nothing yes, exactly, you are There is no in between and I dont mean that as you I mean it as in how you view everything (because you know I will slap you about the nothing part anyhow) I am in awe because you wrote of yourself so eloquently even in pain, it is beauty. another one bringing tears to my eyes its beautiful Raphael xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-26-2003 03:14 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Raph! Very much enjoyed and challenge well met. ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you are this and more more MORE |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Raphael, you are more "All" than naught!  Linda P.S. I just realized what your striking physiognomy reminds me of!--a Roman soldier! |
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Ankaria Junior Member
since 2003-07-26
Posts 35Sask. Canada |
Hmm this is a wonderful piece. You have a wonderful way of just uncovering and baring all. I think you can make this piece a little more personal but how to accomplish that, I'm not quite sure. Overall, it's great and I look forward to reading more of your work. Ankaria |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Worded perfection and a new pic to boot! Awesome. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Dix hard for me too, I'm missing the all and languishing in the other Bri for the right price they're yours call me..grins Thanks Susan for both compliments JM thanks for letting me Thanks Ethel hugs Thanks Sue but the tears in your eyes most likely the pic i posted..grin Thanks Nancy H thanks mirror you know you are Linda I hope that's a compliment? lol Yes I was a soldier who then fought in the gladiator arenas as the crowd cheered Gluteus Maximus they made a movie about me though they changed it a bit Thanks You Ankaria and again welcome to PIP Thanks Chris yer too kind |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
god raph did you read my first draft I SWEAR YOU READ IT!!! weird..stop that!!!  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I understand little of this place I say too much or not enough I dream that She(?) will come I try to try I hope beyond my means I am all or nothing ~*~ Bravo! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I am impressed that you took this challenge...it's so... molded. Heh..i refuse to take it..i still enjoyed yours though  phhllt |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I wasn't sure what the words would be here, Raph. I only knew they would be honest and thought-provoking ones. And I was right. Excellent write, Patricia |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Once again, a powerful write. Okay I know that I am starting to sound like a broken record...but I relate to your words....you know why. I'm glad that you answered this challange, I knew that you would bring justice to it. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Grins sorry Kris Thanks Karilea Liz it snot so molded after all i didn't write..break the mold buy be challeneged Patricia very kind of you to say thanks Yes Melissa i know why, thanks |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am all or nothing. Well, then? You must be all, yes? I think the rest of us concur on that Raph. So you just step in line sweets. Hugs you. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Aenimal, brother poet: You ARE the unique and restless spirit that sees the soul of stars. "I feel the weight of SELF" Always profound, and always a pleasure to read and write with. TD |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
This is excellent, Raph...I love it. Thanks for giving us this peek into 'you'. Hugs, ~Vicky "My friends are my estate." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
K, all? no not yet, not yet TD thanks for the compliment always such wonderful responses Thanks Vicky |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Well worth the wait... I loved the line about touching your wound to see if you still feel... Do you ever look at someone else with confusion because they don't have the wounds they should? Susan C. |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
This is so very profound. (To pretend to die at night) is rather chilling. A very good read. Maggie |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
worry I'll never know l*ve again you already do............. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
As always I love the rhythm in your poem. Drumbeats that touch the heart. Out of the nothing you mention, the All is born. Just great. Bravo, mi piace e mi piaci! Baci. Margherita |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks Susan but that line now that i read it sounds like something I've read before but can't place it..argh Thanks Maggie appreciate it and welcome again thanks Mish Grazie Margherita you always make me smile thank you |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I pretend to die at night I feel the weight of SELF I touch the wounds to see if I still feel I worry I'll never know l*ve again I am all or nothing It's meeeeeeeeee. the weight of self...i like the way you put that. heavy. aaargh that feeling of being buried alive by your own thoughts. and thats not even counting the burden of my actual body weight. lol. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Aye were peas in a pod..its a reaaally big pod..grin now dont you dare make fun of yourself only im allowed |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Wonderful read here ... yes just fabulous. |
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