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spite (for littlewing's challenge)
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spite (for littlewing's challenge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Told that I should write of this so I beckoned black heart knight-- I called upon the dark of king he delivered to me "spite". Riding on a healthy steed protected by the armory hinged--he gave--exquisitely to take the beating of the thrall. There--there was--a slit of eye-- lending him the mystery just a shot of blue to lance-- just a slot to watch him bleed. Horses knew--they stood the stance before the heel would prod the flank Lance before them ignorance as the straw flew they would prance just as if they knew [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (07-26-2003 06:38 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
and you deliver to me a paradigm . . . I must admit, I did not expect "spite" quite like this, but *smiling* ahhhh Karen . . . you are unique I see romance, mystery , fantasy . . . and spite brought to me in a most delicious fashion Yes, they knew just a shot of blue to lance-- just a slot to watch him bleed. Never did I envision it this way seen from the slit of eye an emotion taken and woven to a tale Amazing Karen, and yet, I find such beauty in this . . . I applaud you, m'Lady xxoo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Karen, Left me wanting to know more...you always touch me with your words.. Susan C. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Okay, okay, now....is there any form that youu cannot do? Any emotion that you cannot bring to your readers? I think not. Wonderful, and I am keeping this. hugs,Chris "At one glance |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There--there was--a slit of eye-- lending him the mystery just a shot of blue to lance-- just a slot to watch him bleed. ~*~ Good God.... sigh. Well done! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I must respect you for doing this challenge. It is HARD! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the only thing is I have seen you write every which way..so which way is truly different for you Karen? All is written with great thought and some days you are tough to understand...but it is not your lack of anything, but mine of the seedy side of life. Just call me "prudish"...though that is not how I wish to seem. hugs Maureen |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Horses knew--they stood the stance before the heel would prod the flank Lance before them ignorance as the straw flew they would prance just as if they knew Karen, I'll bet these horses did know.......:heart; I haven't read the challenge, so I don't know what it's about, but this is still very good, as is all yours. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
breathe . . . |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
oooooohhh ahhhhhhh hmm does that even sound right lmao...Karen Oh woah I'm a sucker for this stuff and a sucker for your writing *hoardes this off to her library* Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
DOH forgot to click on the box..the keys are moving on me  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"There--there was--a slit of eye-- lending him the mystery just a shot of blue to lance-- just a slot to watch him bleed. Horses knew--they stood the stance before the heel would prod the flank Lance before them ignorance as the straw flew they would prance just as if they knew" Very cool, lady...I'm liking your 'spite'.   "My friends are my estate." |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
slack jawed snort amazing just sighmazing and someone already said this but this isnt ok yes the spite thing but man.... you can do anything so there is no opposite in writing for you snort I go play with my lance now... geeeez |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nothing you can't do, no |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I'm the stupid forum cop- come to bump this to the top  sigh..i tried. [This message has been edited by Wind (07-27-2003 08:58 PM).] |
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