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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-07-25 08:31 PM



I am, 2003

I am a person of age, and grace
I wonder of soul mates and evermore
I hear light spark and evergreens breathe
I see stars gleam on an ocean’s shore
I want my desires to take root and please
I am a person of age, and grace.

I pretend that I am strong, even when I am not
I feel linguistics in my soul, a virtual polyglot
I touch feathers to a center, that spot within a brain
I worry that I can’t relieve so much heartfelt pain
I cry when my throat has closed on so much human grief
I am a person of age, and grace…and this is my belief.

I understand how I love and how I would love you
I say I believe in everything, in hopes that some comes true
I dream that I shall be a touch upon your very self
I try to bring some comfort, like that book upon your shelf
I hope to be remembered for some silly little thing
I am a person of age, and grace, that a light to you, I’d bring.

© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2003-07-25 08:36 PM


One minor correction?

You are ageless grace.




vlraynes
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2 posted 2003-07-25 08:36 PM



Yes...people grow...and the Sun grows brighter.
Simply beautiful, Karilea.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Martie
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3 posted 2003-07-25 08:41 PM


Karilea....You are all that, yes...and you are on my shelf where I keep special things.  
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4 posted 2003-07-25 09:15 PM


Well.... no need for a moth to write ...
for the Sun just light up the challenge

PERFECT!!!!
and--
very cool the way you added words each time to your repetative line.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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5 posted 2003-07-25 09:28 PM


This is so good, I am speechless.
Sandra

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6 posted 2003-07-25 09:33 PM


Just perfect, this is Karilea.
You shine bright, Sunshine!!!  
Hugs  
Ethel

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7 posted 2003-07-25 10:05 PM


God, you are a beautiful woman

I understand how I love and how I would love you


xxoo

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8 posted 2003-07-25 11:08 PM


Smiling at you...yes, the correction...only one...ageless. Wonderful write! TD
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9 posted 2003-07-25 11:34 PM


Your grace becomes you, Karilea~
wranx
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10 posted 2003-07-25 11:39 PM


Uhm, This is just wonderful...

It is!


Ed

Patricia
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11 posted 2003-07-26 08:07 AM


You are a wonderful friend...an inspiration to me.  You are my sister, forever you will be part of my life, dear Karilea.

Love,
Patricia


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12 posted 2003-07-26 08:45 AM


Keep writing like this, and you will have many, many books on shelves...

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Nan
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13 posted 2003-07-26 09:15 AM


In poetry, we grow - and you surely light the way...
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14 posted 2003-07-26 09:23 AM


---those are some of the reasons why I like you, Dear Rays of Sun!


Linda

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15 posted 2003-07-26 11:04 AM


very nice, we grow or wither, for we rarely stay the same and the growing is by far the preferable.  Well done.
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16 posted 2003-07-26 11:53 AM


Beautiful Karilea....perfectly beautiful and so much like you!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

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17 posted 2003-07-26 05:44 PM


Wow, Karilea this is absolutely wondermous...as you are my friend and yes people grow; and I have since knowing you.

Love you beautiful lady.

this is a

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


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18 posted 2003-07-26 05:49 PM


Karilea:this was amazing.You're as beautiful as the moonlit waters on the shores.Your soul and your poetry never cease to touch me.
angelblueyes

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19 posted 2003-07-26 06:03 PM


I hope to be remembered for some silly little thing
I am a person of age, and grace, that a light to you, I’d bring.


Ah yes, you will be remembered forever and a day my dear Karilea. Lovely. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet  

    

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20 posted 2003-07-26 06:40 PM


this one's very special Karilea

hugs
M

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21 posted 2003-07-26 08:05 PM


I hope to be remembered for some silly little thing
I am a person of age, and grace, that a light to you, I’d bring

Everyone on PIP knows and will remember the light that you speak of

Honeybee
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22 posted 2003-07-26 09:05 PM


This is wonderful Karilea...
you always write of such beauty and wisdom...
and I agree with Karen, you ARE ageless grace.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Ceinwyn
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23 posted 2003-07-27 12:32 PM


I see why your called "Sunshine"  

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (07-27-2003 12:32 AM).]

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24 posted 2003-07-27 03:33 AM


and I am glad you are
Gentle Spirit
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25 posted 2003-07-29 11:10 AM


Mum......thanx...you DO bring the light..

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (07-29-2003 11:14 AM).]

Corinne
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26 posted 2003-07-29 12:40 PM


Sunshine, this is wonderful! No wonder there have been so many replies!

peace to you,


core

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