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wranx
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0 posted 2003-07-25 12:17 PM

I am everyman, and I’m frightened
I wonder what the evening brings
I hear the stone, rolling
And see, the cave dimming
I am everyman, and I’m frightened

I pretend that I am finally made whole
Feeling what a young man once felt
Touching upon what could have been
Crying in secret, over milk that I’ve spilt
I am everyman, and I’m frightened

I do understand that what’s done is done
But believe, I may yet be redeemed
In dreaming away the “everyday”
I try to reconcile “who I am” with “what I am”
Hoping, I can at least acquaint them
I am everyman, and I’m frightened

Sunshine

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1 posted 2003-07-25 12:21 PM

Acquainting who to what...

Now there, Sir, I believe
in that line, you once again
have yet another poem...

do it again.

angelblueyes
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2 posted 2003-07-25 12:22 PM

wranx:This was greatu aros o th chalenge wel.To admit that you are frightened takes alo and shows what a great man you are.
angelblueyes

Martie

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3 posted 2003-07-25 12:28 PM

Ed...To admit to being frightened, takes the courage of honesty ( one of the most important courages)... I already liked you, now, just more. You're way cool!

Mysteria

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4 posted 2003-07-25 12:32 PM

Well now - outside of the cying over spilt milk, you took the words out of my mouth, that is if I even had them there in the first place.

Oh for goodness sake, someone give this man the "gold star" he earned it.

Awesome write, and isn't it amazing how honesty makes for the best poems?

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (07-25-2003 02:54 PM).]

Sunshine

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5 posted 2003-07-25 12:59 PM

Don't ever let it be said
that Sun doesn't listen to
Mysteria. There you go, Ed...
one gold star!!!!

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2003-07-25 01:00 PM

Wranx, my brother poet:
You ARE the dream and gentle spirit of the sacred man. You give me much in terms of think and smile. Thank you. TD

passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-07-25 01:04 PM

wow...what a write Ed

wranx
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8 posted 2003-07-25 01:46 PM

"Everyman" would like to thank everyone, for the kind replies.

"You shouldn't be surprised at what happens next"

arthur
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9 posted 2003-07-25 02:57 PM

so true wranx -so true
what we are -and what we would be -and the gulf that lies between
arthur

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Canada eh.

10 posted 2003-07-25 03:01 PM

Amazingly honest write..
Yes..you do deserve a gold star...

Challenge well met poet sir.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

garysgirl

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11 posted 2003-07-25 03:02 PM

I do understand that what’s done is done
But believe, I may yet be redeemed
In dreaming away the “everyday”
I try to reconcile “who I am” with “what I am”
Hoping, I can at least acquaint them

Ed, this is such a humble write. It's beautiful
and comes from the heart of a beautiful human being.

Hugs to you, Sir

Ethel

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12 posted 2003-07-25 03:16 PM

You encompass the good of "every man!"--and every good poet!

Linda

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13 posted 2003-07-25 05:27 PM

You delight me once again.

You take the accessible and make it personal, then you took the personal and made it accessible to all.

"I am everyman and I'm frightened."

Perfect, yeti.

vlraynes
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14 posted 2003-07-25 05:32 PM

Yes...I love the honesty of this, Ed.
Enjoyed this glimpse into the deeper 'you'.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Dark Angel
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15 posted 2003-07-25 05:40 PM

Ed? this is absolutely brilliant and m'friend? so are you.

this is a "keeper"

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

littlewing
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16 posted 2003-07-25 05:42 PM

Ok, the honesty and sincerity of this brought tears to my eyes . . .
is beautiful . . .
xxoo

icebox
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in the shadows

17 posted 2003-07-25 05:46 PM

"Touching upon what could have been..."

Yes. This haunts us all from time to time.

Thank you for sharing who you are in this one slice of time.

nakdthoughts
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18 posted 2003-07-25 06:21 PM

"Crying in secret, over milk that I’ve spilt
I am everyman, and I’m frightened"

simply stated but deeply felt...

M

Nan

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19 posted 2003-07-25 07:14 PM

To be everyman would indeed be frightening... Where would one begin to unravel our wrongs... Nicely done, sir...

BluesSerenade
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20 posted 2003-07-26 02:06 AM

I do understand that what’s done is done
But believe, I may yet be redeemed
In dreaming away the “everyday”
I try to reconcile “who I am” with “what I am”
Hoping, I can at least acquaint them
I am everyman, and I’m frightened

Me too~ Thanks wranx!
I'm afraid to write what I am, right now!!
I don't dare, for fear I might blubber!

That green light is looking way to green,
if you know what I mean.

Nice,  as always~

brian sites
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21 posted 2003-07-26 02:11 PM

Ed, my friend
you distilled
what you say in your poems
to this

great write

Nightshade

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just out of reach

22 posted 2003-07-26 03:28 PM

Alrighty then....this is just too good and I am keeping it!! hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

Ratleader

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23 posted 2003-07-27 11:15 AM

I wish I had written this....thinking of how many times I've written it in my head but never put it on paper. Well done, Ed

Ed

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Midnitesun

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24 posted 2003-07-27 11:24 AM

And everywoman thanks you, Ed.
LOL, I refuse to unplug this PC until late this afternoon, at which time, I MUST depart this apt.

just had to get my wranxfix for the day

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

25 posted 2003-07-27 11:26 AM

LOL at Kacy! (and thanks)

GO! MOVE already!

"I've lost all I can...now, it's your turn"

suthern

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26 posted 2003-07-27 05:27 PM

This is definitely one of my favorite responses to the challenge... the second verse is especially stunning... and touching. *S*

vandana

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27 posted 2003-07-27 07:32 PM

enjoyed

Seymour Tabin
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28 posted 2003-07-27 07:42 PM

wranx,

I am
Frightened
For
My brother

I hope
My brother
Is frightened
For me.

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