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Amature2
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0 posted 2003-07-24 09:46 PM



I Am

I am an insomniac and a bit insane
I wonder how I got this way
I hear voices in my head
I see shadows in the dark
I want to sleep and dream for a change
I am an insomniac and a bit insane

I pretend to move forward but
I feel I'm floating on air
I touch the clouds in the sky
I worry they will rain on me
I cry when I am lonely
I am an insomniac and a bit insane

I understand the feeling of being alone
I say time is on your side
I dream of falling in an abyss
I try to hold on to something
I hope I don't hit bottom
I am an insomniac and a bit insane

"No matter what obsticles life may bring, remember, You can fly" author unknown

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just out of reach
1 posted 2003-07-24 11:11 PM


Very well written. Seems to be the type of challenge that really shows the inner thoughts of the poet  - I would like to try....but am a little scared. lol. Chris
angelblueyes
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2 posted 2003-07-24 11:13 PM


Nicely done.You've arose to the challenge.Don't think I'm quite that godd yet.Maybe in time.The insomnia part I can relate to.
angelblueyes

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3 posted 2003-07-24 11:14 PM


echoing Chris...

what I love about this challenge is that we see ourselves in each other...and realize our differences are minimal compared to the similarities.

I love this.

And thank for being brave enough to dive deep.



enjoyed.

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-07-24 11:22 PM


"I dream of falling in an abyss
I try to hold on to something"

Hold my hand...we can keep each other from going over the edge...

Susan C.

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2003-07-25 12:13 PM


Amature2, fellow poet:
You are the mystery and gentle question that churns the mind.  Enjoy your write. TD

Sunshine
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6 posted 2003-07-25 12:19 PM



I think I like the responses
you're getting as much as
what you left for us all to know...

welcome, fellow insomniac!

nakdthoughts
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7 posted 2003-07-25 06:41 PM


I am hoping you don't hit bottom either


Nicely done!

M

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-07-25 06:43 PM


Amature,

you sure are not the only one
trust me on this
amazing job
xxoo

Amature2
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9 posted 2003-07-25 08:22 PM


Thank you all very much for your comments, this is the first challenge i have done, and i must say, it was fun doing this, once again, thanks.
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