The Lie That Beckons Breath

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Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-24 03:43 PM

The scent you'd
left behind.

I could not
inhale you,
for burning
causes
blisters in my memory.

Though
horrid tranquility
envelopes me in
silence,
I still kept
your face in mind.

As kissed a sunset.
Pictured a
blissful moment.
Intercepting angels,
starving for my
intellect.

I crept,
through my own home,
stole a wish from
my own star.
Free my lungs can
finally breathe
my own air.

I equalize the blame,
though I
have none to spare.
I
cruise through vaults of
trust and find
that I hope,
you choke
upon the lie.

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2003-07-24 03:50 PM

I crept,
through my own home,
stole a wish from
my own star.
Free my lungs can
finally breathe
my own air.

~&~

All of your poetry
makes me want to reach out
squeeze love into you
and mother you,
unconditionally.

But that's probably going
overboard.

Excellent writing, Meghan.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2003-07-24 06:16 PM

The scent you'd
left behind.

I could not
inhale you,
for burning
causes
blisters in my memory.

Though
horrid tranquility
envelopes me in
silence,
I still kept
your face in mind.

As kissed a sunset.
Pictured a
blissful moment.
Intercepting angels,
starving for my
intellect.

I crept,
through my own home,
stole a wish from
my own star.
Free my lungs can
finally breathe
my own air.
=========================

oh man...this one went thru me....

you wrote a moth anthem here....

The scent you'd
left behind.

I could not
inhale you,
for burning
causes
blisters in my memory.

my oh my oh my....

you write from places deep poetess ... and I feel your words.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2003-07-24 06:23 PM

Kaoru

Much depth of emotion...a powerful write!

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

4 posted 2003-07-24 07:22 PM

thought i responded...great write

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

5 posted 2003-07-24 07:27 PM

Great poem.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-07-24 09:24 PM

I
cruise through vaults of
trust and find
that I hope,
you choke
upon the lie.

venom beautifully written venom awesome

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

7 posted 2003-07-28 07:34 AM

Damn. Wish I'd written this. I think we have the same kind of person in our lives, who we'd like to choke some kind of sincerity out of.

I'm with Raph, perfect venom, perfect poem to ease heartbreak, so thanks M.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

8 posted 2003-07-28 07:56 AM

The scent you'd
left behind.

I could not
inhale you,
for burning
causes
blisters in my memory.

Whoah! A powerful write. There are so many great lines in this piece. The quote above...hmmm...I could reach out and touch this one in every dimension!

Excellent!

Patricia

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