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VOE
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0 posted 2003-07-24 08:48 AM


She said 'I do' and so did you
But that doesn't mean you own her very soul
A woman she will always be
Not a puppet who is under your control...

Her love is pure you can be sure
But it's given by her choice and not demand
Can you object to show respect
Like you did the day your ring went on her hand?

She needs to know you'll let her grow
That you'll be there when she spreads her wings to fly
And after all, if she should fall
Your shoulder is the one on which she'll cry...

You said 'I do' and she did too
That's a promise that will be forevermore
Though in between, it sometimes seems
That a lot of give and take is what's in store...

But in the end you're her best friend
You're the special love she tells her secrets to
And you will be through eternity
For she promised, so did you
On that day she said 'I Do'...

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

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El_Campeador
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since 2003-01-29
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1 posted 2003-07-24 08:53 AM


The problem is that we don't see what love is really all about. We too often think selfishly, but real love isn't selfish...

Great poem!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

VOE
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2 posted 2003-07-24 08:57 AM


Thank you, El_Campeador, and you are right...real love isn't selfish, but as we are all human by nature, we sometimes forget and slip.  That's where communication comes in, and poetry is a great way to express yourself!  So glad to see you here!!  ~V~

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

Ariana
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3 posted 2003-07-25 01:59 PM


VOE
Love is a two street.  If one of the partners is selfish, then it certainly ruins the whole thing.  Love it!

                       Ariana

Ladybug
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since 2003-06-17
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4 posted 2003-07-25 02:03 PM


This took a completely different turn than I expected from the first stanza, but that is why I like it so much.  Great poem

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
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5 posted 2003-07-25 02:18 PM


Love is definetly a twoway street and whe one doesn't meet halfway it causes friction.
I like the viewpoint you gave here.
angelblueyes

VOE
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6 posted 2003-07-25 03:17 PM


Thank you Ariana, and I do so agree...too many times the love we think we have shows a different face later on. Nice to see you!! ~V~

Thank you Ladybug, and I'm glad it held surprises for you!  That is nice to know!  ~V~

Thank you Angelblueyes, and sometimes there has to be a bit of friction to get us out of our ruts, to make things better. It makes us or breaks us, eh?  ~V~

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

catalinamoon
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7 posted 2003-07-25 09:26 PM


Yes, I do know this feeling, it isn't always easy.
Nicely done.
Sandra

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8 posted 2003-07-25 09:39 PM


But in the end you're her best friend
You're the special love she tells her secrets to
And you will be through eternity
For she promised, so did you
On that day she said 'I Do'...


VOE, this is a very good poem. I agree
with "her"...communication is a major
ingredient in a loving relationship.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Hugs  
Ethel

Janette
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9 posted 2003-07-26 10:21 AM


Enjoyed this take on "I do" in which I agree.
Earth Angel
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10 posted 2003-07-26 10:26 AM


You look like the actress Bo Derek!

You're beautiful!--and you write beautifully as well!


EA

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