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QjQ
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0 posted 2003-07-23 09:24 PM




~
the first day we met
our wedding and honeymoon
the day you left me
~
        




[This message has been edited by QjQ (07-23-2003 10:00 PM).]

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timothysangel1973
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1 posted 2003-07-23 10:01 PM


Okay Q, you can't be juggling with my emotions that way...I'm already looney as it is...I didn't know whether to laugh or cry...

But, if that last mine means what I think it does...then AMEN!  Cause I been there and done that, and man...when "he" left, that was the happiest day of my life!

Great write!

A woman has got to love a bad man once or twice in her life, to be thankful for a good one.
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vlraynes
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2 posted 2003-07-23 10:05 PM



Ouch...much said in these few words, my friend.  Well done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2003-07-23 10:19 PM


I'm a bit confused with this one because of the wink. I see that these were big occasions in your life, the last one being  a not-so-good one, I presume. Hope all is well now in your life and you're happy!

Warm hugs,
EA

angelblueyes
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4 posted 2003-07-23 11:11 PM


So much said in such few words.Hope your life is better now.Nicely done.
angelblueyes

Jason Lyle
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5 posted 2003-07-24 01:02 AM


Great write...but so sad.

Jason

garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-07-24 02:25 AM


Glenn, this is a very well written senryu,
but the last line has me confused, too.
Hugs
Ethel

JilGirl
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7 posted 2003-07-24 04:34 PM


Wondering WHICH one of these "daze"
was your "happiest"(?)

Clever write!
Based on fiction, I presume(?)

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

Mystic One
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8 posted 2004-01-17 01:56 PM


Terrific!!!!
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