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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-07-23 06:36 AM



Shown

time passed
revealing
who you
really were
under layers
of skin
but snakes
don’t usually
show themselves
till they
bite you

"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

© Copyright 2003 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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1 posted 2003-07-23 07:29 AM


This is...perfect!  I'd love to show this to the snake I know, but its much more fun reading and being glad we're rid of them!

keeping this.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
2 posted 2003-07-23 07:35 AM


A deplorable truth ... well said!
Love, Margherita

peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
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3 posted 2003-07-23 09:23 AM


Oh my goodness, I surely know someone I'd like to share this with.. but I wonder if that person who have the perception to understand.. and then I think.. why bother.. I, we, shall just enjoy it here with you

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
4 posted 2003-07-23 11:25 AM


I placing this on my xmas cards this year
Ladybug
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5 posted 2003-07-23 11:29 AM


LMAO at Aenimal's comment!

I absolutely loved this poem.  The snake metaphor is perfect, and this short poem says so much.  I think we all know at least one person who fits this description!  Excellent write!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-07-23 11:33 AM


LOL, I love this, Helen.
And, that sounds like a good idea Raph
has with some of this ex's, doesn't it?
Hugs  
Ethel

S Arthur Grey
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since 2001-03-19
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woven by a poet's loom
7 posted 2003-07-23 05:31 PM


. . . right in the asp.
(ohhhh, ok, I hear the loud grown) . . .
just couldn't resist  

(ya know i love your work)

s.a.g.

gemjop
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8 posted 2003-07-28 11:02 AM


  

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Robert Frazier
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9 posted 2003-07-28 11:07 AM


full of proverbial wisdom, you are!  
Janette
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Chicagoland for now
10 posted 2003-07-28 11:35 PM


OUCH!

I adored this one ... you go girl!

passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2003-07-29 03:48 AM


yeah, I know this well
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