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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-07-21 02:58 PM




A kick
for the wrench
in stomach deep,

Physical pain solace
upon the wound
would be nice.

Instead
I'm still here
loosened
bolt upright,

The comb
still leaves
tangled years
of you,

No matter
how I try
and rid you
out this head.


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Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
1 posted 2003-07-21 03:02 PM


The comb
still leaves
tangled years
of you,

No matter
how I try
and rid you
out this head.

this is brilliant gem the perfect imagery..

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (07-21-2003 03:03 PM).]

Wind
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since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981

2 posted 2003-07-21 03:07 PM


you are the....ehh good poet person. yeah! go Gemma
PKreturns
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since 2003-07-21
Posts 362
New Orleans, LA
3 posted 2003-07-21 03:09 PM


One word in American slang: "cool".
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
4 posted 2003-07-21 03:30 PM


Jesus Gem . . .
never would have thought of using a comb
(edited by myself) brilliant!
amazing . . .
xxoo

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
5 posted 2003-07-22 12:27 PM


The comb
still leaves
tangled years
of you,

No matter
how I try
and rid you
out this head.


Gemma, you are good, little lady.
Sorry that I didn't reply to this before now. I turn my computer off when the thunderstorms come to visit every afterneoon.
Loveya        
Ethel Mae

Duncan
Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

6 posted 2003-07-22 12:45 PM


"The comb
still leaves
tangled years
of you,

No matter
how I try
and rid you
out this head."

Maybe you should use that "No More Tears" shampoo!  

brian sites
Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
7 posted 2003-07-22 01:55 AM


clever you

Goldenrose
Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

8 posted 2003-07-22 06:42 AM


Very good..clever little english woman....well done gem...and thanks...
Goldenrose

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