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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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gOD standing on the dock in the middle of another shift your hands tremble as you come to the realization that maybe this is all you're meant to be despite what people tell you in a world of balancing forces rational thinking declares that for everything there is a counter balance the laws of nature thrive on dualities and you must be the flipside of a successful, beautiful, happy woman you sit on the edge of the dock and stare blankly into the sun as tears fill your eyes because you know that even if you could bring yourself to believe in gOD there'd be no doubt in your mind that the sadist hates you |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
of a successful, beautiful, happy woman Hows it going bird? You are! Such a pretty lady. round my way the birds are minging. put the song on!it works for two minutes or so. in all seriousness, too much of this makes sense for any of it to be funny. i love it when ur stuff reads like a story.does that make sense? tell us another grandma!  |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Great job. You never seem to have a bad write... How about sending some of that talent my way?? lol We see the light of those |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
you sit on the edge of the dock and stare blankly into the sun as tears fill your eyes because you know that even if you could bring yourself to believe in gOD there'd be no doubt in your mind that the sadist hates you Raphey, I hate it that you feel this way. It makes me sad.  You know what? You are one of the best at telling how you really feel. I wish I could tell about the sad parts. I can't though. They stay inside and give me stomach problems. The only person I seem to be able to tell about my sad part of me is Gary. I wish so much that I could write poems about it, though. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Now you already know I am going to disagree with you . . . I dont think that you need anyone as a flipside and He doesnt hate you despite what your brain tells you daily I still pray . . . I do - always will Raph you know that and this really did hurt to read xxoo |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I'm beginning to think . . . separated at birth? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Gem i did say the flipside therefor the direct opposite of successful, beautiful woman would be a...me Ringo plentttttttty of bad writes believe me but thanks for the compliment Thanks Ethel and thankfully you have someone to share it with Sue it's about balance if there are winners there are also... krawdad grins quite possibly |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
please, take a vacation to a pretty island, and enjoy the sun for a while good poetry thou rapphael as always |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is sad..sending hugs your way. ~soft smiles, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Mish I'd love to can't afford it Hugs back at ya night thanks Nancy |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This seriously deserves a double DAMN! And that last line: damn, damn DAMN! You'll never know how much I relate...this is your best and sometimes you write so raw, so powerful that I have no clever words to say. I've already re-read this several times and of course I'm saving this. Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! [This message has been edited by Honeybee (07-21-2003 10:45 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks M I know you can relate we share alot of the same BS. One day maybe who knows we'll get out of these chains.. Dracula |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
you sit on the edge of the dock and stare blankly into the sun as tears fill your eyes because you know that even if you could bring yourself to believe in gOD there'd be no doubt in your mind that the sadist hates you I go out of town for a weekend, and you post this.Awesome writing.I think sometimes when people read you, they forget the other side of the coin.I truelly understand what its like to almost believe, get half an answer, and want to know if its all so true? Why does it hurt? Awesome words Raph Jason |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
wowowow.. Ifelt this. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Hey jason I posted it today i was waiting for you to get back..grin yeah its those half answers, not being able to completely believe of forget.. Thanks Kaoru appreciate it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you've been watching me! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"your hands tremble as you come to the realization that maybe this is all you're meant to be despite what people tell you" ...seriously.... fantastic write |
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