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Jelv
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0 posted 2003-07-20 07:53 AM


hey go easy this is my first attempt at a poem and I have no idea and probably defiantly needs work, but comments are very welcome..

Human Jungle

Tight belts, even tighter shirts,
Copious flesh, excessive heat,
Lustful looks and replusive mating,
This human jungle draws us in.

© Copyright 2003 Jelv - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-07-20 10:15 AM


WELCOME to Passions!
and yes, a couple of typos gave me a laugh:
1.defiantly...made me chuckle, but I knew you meant definitely
2.repulsive, not replusive
repulsive mating?

Once you read the guidelines and tech info you'll learn how to edit, and about all the different forums available. I just edited this message twice.

WELCOME! and enjoy the variety here.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-20-2003 10:18 AM).]

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2 posted 2003-07-20 10:37 AM


Welcome to Passions In poetry, Jelv. We're happy that you have decided to join our poetic community. We look forward to your sharing your poems with us and we think you'll enjoy the work of others as well. We're all very supportive of each other, reading and responding in turn. We encourage you to join in. Again, welcome to our family of friends at PIP. Please check your e-mail for a special greeting from all of us.  
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