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Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2003-07-20 03:39 AM


I live forever
and have nothing
to live for;
all that I deemed precious
has been lost
in this journey,
this desire
to explore the darkness
that surrounds me.

Night and sleep
chase each other
in an endless orbit
of despair
circling my heart,
that fills my dreams
with shadows
while my waking
is surrounded
by nightmares
too vivid to be true.

Restlessness pecks
at me as I wander
labyrinthine pathways
shaded by
night and sorrow
while the
timelessness
of the moon
laughs in
hollow mockery.

The circadian rhythms
that monitor
the heartbeats of my
existence have
disappeared
in the twilight of eternity
while the love that
called me to this
has degenerated
to dust and ash.

Walking, ever walking,
through the corridors
of time that have no end;
I beg for release
and the echo of
my plea rebounds
from the walls
in doppelganger
mimicry;
while I live forever
and pray for
the world to cease

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



© Copyright 2003 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-07-20 04:00 AM


Lynne:

God this is brilliant . . .

The circadian rhythms
that monitor
the heartbeats of my
existence

Amazing writing and sadly, I do know this beast as well
xxoo

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2003-07-20 10:26 AM


MyMyMyMzKethry~
This IS outstanding !!!!!

'Night and sleep
chase each other
in an endless orbit'


A thought of the word 'labrynith' came to me before I even opened this ... you sent me that thought ????  I think it must be so~

I will see if it wants to talk to me~
Love you gal~
*HooleyDooleyHuglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Ivy Rose
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300
MA, USA
3 posted 2003-07-20 12:11 PM


Kethry...Very well expressed verse. My very favorite part of this poem is this:

The circadian rhythms
that monitor
the heartbeats of my
existence have
disappeared
in the twilight of eternity
while the love that
called me to this
has degenerated
to dust and ash.

Wonderful imagery throughout; but especially here. ***Ivy Rose

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-07-20 01:19 PM


Night and sleep
chase each other
in an endless orbit
of despair
circling my heart,
that fills my dreams
with shadows
while my waking
is surrounded
by nightmares
too vivid to be true.


What a talented writer you are, Lynne.
I love to read your work....I wish I could write
like you do. It's beautiful.  
Hugs  
Ethel


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
5 posted 2003-07-20 01:21 PM


what a vivid picture you've painted here...love the last verse
peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
Texas, USA
6 posted 2003-07-21 02:47 AM


I read this and I think thusly.. "I am supposed to be able to write.. I am supposed to be able to write".... so why is it that I cannot think of the words to tell you how marvelous this is or the immensity of the feelings it inspired..

It simply leaves me.. intensely emotional but speechless..  

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...
7 posted 2003-07-22 07:19 AM


Simply awesome!

i'm not saying anybody's wrong or right,
just know i'd die to be with you tonight ~ sandford

Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2003-07-22 12:46 PM


DarlingGirl~
'It' spoke ... and I even spelled it right !!!!  LOL ... noticed my typo on 'Labyrinth' last night and it was too late to change it !!

Here ya' go -
/pip/Forum80/HTML/003129.html

*HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

vandana
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9 posted 2003-07-22 05:07 PM


enjoyed
scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
10 posted 2003-07-22 07:37 PM


Intense read...I was totally absorbed in this...wow!

believe in what your heart feels...

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
11 posted 2003-07-22 08:10 PM


Kethry - you're a most talented writer. I feel the sad of this all and pray that you are well of heart...

BC

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

12 posted 2003-07-22 09:22 PM


Lynne the imagery is fantabulous.

Adding this to my library.

Maree

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148
Oklahoma
13 posted 2003-07-22 10:04 PM


Lynne,
You are a great writer.I felt al the lostness and despair in this and I hope that your heart is soon full of light again.
angelblueyes

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
14 posted 2003-07-22 11:19 PM


Riveting read...you brought me through the depths of this despair...
My hand on your hand...well done Lynne. TD

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
15 posted 2003-07-22 11:35 PM


I know what you mean, Keth. I feel the same after eating Vegemite, too!
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