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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-07-18 02:20 PM


my father only asks
me how i feel
so he can tell me
how much worse he does
my brother only listens
to me rant about my father
long enough to tell me
how much more
he's had to go through
and when i try to vent
to a friend on life
they tell me why there's
are far more complex
so if I go quiet
when you ask whats wrong
forgive me I'm just tired
of the competition

bllllllaaaaaah what a piece of crap but itching to post..

© Copyright 2003 raphael giuffrida - All Rights Reserved
Soleil Noir
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since 2001-12-19
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1 posted 2003-07-18 02:31 PM



but I KNOW this!

Q:  "Why don't you ever complain?"

A:  "Because I'm always one-upped."

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace
2 posted 2003-07-18 02:38 PM


you win
inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
3 posted 2003-07-18 02:45 PM


my father only asks
me how i feel
so he can tell me
how much worse he does
my brother only listens
to me rant about my father
long enough to tell me
how much more
he's had to go through


sounds like a classic sunday family dinner,
with some agita (spelling ?) for an appetizer

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

4 posted 2003-07-18 03:17 PM


Piece-a-crap, eh?
Want a suggestion or two?
You have an itch to post,
I have an itch to edit.

(Perhaps I merely control the postitch better than the edititch.)  

Kraw'

Earth Angel
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Posts 40215
Realms of Light
5 posted 2003-07-18 03:22 PM


Not only was your poem an interesting read, but so were the replies that it elicited!

Brings to mind the line from "Crocodile Dundee" ---"You call that a knife?!?--Now, THIS is a KNIFE!!!"

Huggums,
EA

Brad Majors
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Georgia
6 posted 2003-07-18 07:48 PM


I miss reading your work!
littlewing
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New York
7 posted 2003-07-18 10:17 PM


indeed . . . indeed
Deus
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California, US
8 posted 2003-07-18 10:26 PM


Interesting thought process and a nice write.
timothysangel1973
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9 posted 2003-07-19 01:37 AM



"so if I go quiet
when you ask whats wrong
forgive me I'm just tired
of the competition"


Ain't that the truth...no matter how bad we have it...someone else is always sure that they have it worse!

Great write...even if it was just a way to get your name on today's list of topics...haha




[This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (07-19-2003 01:41 AM).]

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2003-07-19 01:41 AM


damn, ain't that the truth? I can relate...everyone always has a "one-up" story, don't they?
icebox
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383
in the shadows
11 posted 2003-07-19 02:37 AM


Oh yeah? You think your poem sucks?  Why you should have been around when I wrote.....

*LAUGH*   Sorry Sir, I just couldn't help it.  You really did touch on one of the more maddening of human characteristics.  

Hope you feel better soon.

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148
Oklahoma
12 posted 2003-07-19 03:36 AM


I liked the write and the responses it brought out.Good job.
angelblueyes

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
13 posted 2003-07-19 03:56 AM


Thanks Soleil lol

Yeah H that's me a total winner

Mish i think that's the right spelling lol yeah pretty much

krawdad you can edit mine if youre inclined grins

Linda and you just reminded me of a simpsons spoof of that scene
Aussie:"That's no a knife THIS is a knife"
Bart:"Thats not a knife it's a spoon."
Aussie embarrassed) "Oh, I see you've played knife n spoony before"
ok so you had to see it..pbhlllllt

Miss yours Brad where you been?

Sue indeed

Grins Timsangel thanks

Dixie yup it's enough to make you go baseball bat shopping

Ice LMAO thanks bud needed that..witty @&#*&#@!
thanks angelblueeyes welcoem to PIP

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (07-19-2003 03:56 AM).]

Wind
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14 posted 2003-07-19 05:26 PM


Everyone's got it worse than everyone else. And I only listen to hear you complain..and act insane. Off to find more..this is taking a nice chunk out of my boring day
Midnitesun
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Gaia
15 posted 2003-07-19 05:32 PM


Oh yah!?
well, I think I could win that crap-post contest, hands down!


ROTFL.

Nightshade
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just out of reach
16 posted 2003-07-19 05:45 PM


Oh ya?!! You think you have the worst crappy post?!! I can beat all of ya! I wrote a poem so bad even I couldn't stand to read it!!!   Not even walking uphill 20 miles to school in a drving snowstorm every morning at 4 a.m. !!!!
Midnitesun
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Gaia
17 posted 2003-07-19 06:04 PM


Do I smell a stinky poetry contest brewing? LOL
Probably not for Open.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-19-2003 06:04 PM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
18 posted 2003-07-19 07:37 PM


Raffaele ...  that's a good one and so true!
Let the one without sin cast the first stone!!
It's a very diffused habit ...
Abbracci.
Margherita

icebox
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Posts 4383
in the shadows
19 posted 2003-07-20 12:44 PM


Wait a minute!  Shouldn't it be, "May the one who is stoned first cast the first sinner???"



Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
20 posted 2003-07-20 02:47 AM


Thanks everyone lol and ice I through the last one a good 6 yards beat that..damn i got the munchies
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