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Peter J Marcroft
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since 2003-02-02
Posts 265
York, England

0 posted 2003-07-18 03:49 AM


Darkness, that is all that I see,
Here in the depths of the water,
Where fish should swim through my hair,
I only hear my heart begin to falter.

Lost...I swam too far and too deep,
Now I can see no way out,
Foolish arrogance brought me here,
I was too confident, I had no doubt.

Ah but the joyous wonder of it,
I thought it would be worse than this,
I imagined me kicking and struggling,
But instead I drift through the abyss.

My mind is swimming with new faces,
My body swims and dives like a fish,
I am at one with the vast dark ocean,
Now I am free from the suffering flesh.

But alas in the distance, a weak light,
Could it be a craft for my salvation?
Perhaps it is the sign of paradise calling,
Both options are better than damnation.



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JaiOfHeaven
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 207
California, Usa
1 posted 2003-07-18 03:54 AM


...wow...
Took  me on a journey.
Misty blue light of clear waters
surrounded my essence of reality.
Thanks man!
check out...my post "jo"
I experimented with it.

Jai

Peter J Marcroft
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since 2003-02-02
Posts 265
York, England
2 posted 2003-07-18 04:10 AM


thanks for the feedback glad you enjoyed.
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2003-07-18 11:20 AM


But alas in the distance, a weak light,
Could it be a craft for my salvation?
Perhaps it is the sign of paradise calling,

It's no contest when given the choice to sink or swim!

Enjoyed your poem Peter.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
4 posted 2003-07-18 01:04 PM


Lost...I swam too far and too deep,

thats where i find myself.......

Peter J Marcroft
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since 2003-02-02
Posts 265
York, England
5 posted 2003-07-18 06:18 PM


I am glad you people enjoyed this
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