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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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We buried you with flowers, though no one knew which rose was cultivated celebrating grand deceptions; then we fed the stragglers, who could not take the hint, who kept reaching for condolences surprised when nothing fit. You would have liked the show as well, the viewing was so grand I would have thought the skies would weep, you posed so calmly there with prayer beads in your hands. In the end there was only sun, and heat, the glowing embers of deceit, and all of us survived well... almost everyone. ©2003 by icebox [This message has been edited by icebox (07-18-2003 12:01 AM).] |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Great write Ice! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox "who kept reaching for condolences surprised when nothing fit." Death is like a new suit you have never worn before, not with this mirror, or all these people waiting to see how you are. Hard to know, to say, be right from any angle. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
An absolutely amazing piece ice..i can't write a cohesive response to this i'm on meds..lol |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Yet another incredible masterpiece from your pen. An extremely powerful and touching write. Well done.  Hugs, ~Vicky "it is better to be a part of beauty for one instant and then cease to exist than to exist forever and never be a part of beauty" -- Don Marquis [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-18-2003 12:18 AM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
In the end there was only sun, and heat, the glowing embers of deceit, and all of us survived well... almost everyone. Oh my, how prolific you are!! When death comes to call, we'll make our grand exit in due time. I just hope I won't be decieved by deceit! You've got so much talent in that icebox, Mister!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stunning write...always enjoy you |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very good. i enjoyed it. Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
who kept reaching for condolences surprised when nothing fit. and all of us survived well... almost everyone. *shaking head* Wow. That's powerful. Kielo |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
nicely written, great flow and feel for this piece--great job |
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