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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-07-17 10:11 PM



If I could gather you around
in shades of autumn leaves

I'd place them one by one
down the center of my peace

To adore you in the candlelight
and toast you with my eyes

Burning amber in the moonlight,
blowing kisses across the sky

I'd breathe you in down deep inside
and wish upon a single star

Kindling the flames
for every dream that you inspire

Savoring the fall
on a bed of golden leaves

When December rains a shiver
and the weather starts to storm

Will you come to me at last
and whisper in my ear

that you still love me~

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-18-2003 02:25 AM).]

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JaiOfHeaven
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1 posted 2003-07-17 10:17 PM


...I think...
I love you...
Twas' a nice write.
Thanks for the warm fuzzies.

Jai

Nightshade
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just out of reach
2 posted 2003-07-17 10:22 PM


Hey Bluesylady!  Now this is very, very tender and sweet. Enjoyed. Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."


— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet  

    

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2003-07-17 10:33 PM



Blues...this is lovely...especially this...

"When December rains a shiver
and the weather starts to storm

Will you come to me at last
and whisper in my ear

that you still love me~"

Being the lover of storms that I am, this just grabbed me.
Much enjoyed.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"So here I am with pockets full of good intentions
But none of them will comfort me tonight..." ~Carpenters

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2003-07-17 10:47 PM


Oooh how lovely...very gentle and loving.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~

inkedgoddess
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5 posted 2003-07-17 11:13 PM


Will you come to me at last
and whisper in my ear

that you still love me~

.........i still do, i never stopped
very nice words, you are one romantic blonde

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2003-07-18 03:20 AM


love it! ending perfect!
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
7 posted 2003-07-18 11:43 AM


Thanks so much for reading everyone.
Some days are just plain lonely!
Whoooa is me, what's a girl to do!  

Hugs you guys~


mirror man
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8 posted 2003-07-18 09:17 PM


Very lonely, loving.  Enjoyed this very much.
x8x_bigmike
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9 posted 2003-07-18 09:19 PM


this poem came to me as an dream-desire...something that you hope someone will fill, and if some has before your blessed...i loved the way you encapsolated desire in the verse...beautifull

Mike

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
10 posted 2003-07-18 09:20 PM


BluesSerenade - it's nice to see the romantic side of you again...

BC

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
11 posted 2003-07-18 10:48 PM


flows nicely with poetic beauty.

Jason

timothysangel1973
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12 posted 2003-07-19 12:55 PM


This one is going to the    

Another wonderful write Bluesy girl!



[This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (07-19-2003 12:56 AM).]

littlewing
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13 posted 2003-07-19 09:45 PM


Jesus Bluesy . . .
this ohh so true so true
xxoo

garysgirl
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14 posted 2003-07-19 09:54 PM


To adore you in the candlelight
and toast you with my eyes

Burning amber in the moonlight,
blowing kisses across the sky

I'd breathe you in down deep inside
and wish upon a single star


Lori, this is so beautiful.
Hugs  
Ethel

angelblueyes
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Oklahoma
15 posted 2003-07-19 10:25 PM


This was beautiful. You are a talented poetess.I look forward to reading mor from you.Thanks.
angelblueyes

ThisDiamond
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Michigan, USA
16 posted 2003-07-19 10:34 PM


Yahuh...blonde and beautiful.  
What a wonderful write...innocent, tender, expressive.  Well done girl. TD

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
17 posted 2003-07-20 09:18 PM


How nice to come home to.  
You all suprised you did, thank you so much for reading,  it encourages me in every way.


The firmest friendships are formed with mutual adversity, like steal unites with the fiercest flame. (author unknown to me)

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-20-2003 10:46 PM).]

EagleOne
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18 posted 2003-07-22 07:23 AM


Very nice indeed!

i'm not saying anybody's wrong or right,
just know i'd die to be with you tonight ~ sandford

Goldenrose
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19 posted 2003-07-22 08:34 AM


This a very nice write of love....thank you for the beautiful words....

Goldenrose.

scorpio
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right...there
20 posted 2003-07-22 08:42 AM


A soft romantic approach..very beautiful..

believe in what your heart feels...

SEA
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with you
21 posted 2003-07-22 09:25 AM


picking a favorite liine here is impossible! The begining grabs me,

"If I could gather you around
in shades of autumn leaves"


then this....is just so beautiful,

To adore you in the candlelight
and toast you with my eyes

Burning amber in the moonlight,
blowing kisses across the sky


and this part goes so perfect with the begining lines ,

Kindling the flames
for every dream that you inspire

Savoring the fall
on a bed of golden leaves


and the ending....*sigh* I  am so ready for Fall!

When December rains a shiver
and the weather starts to storm

Will you come to me at last
and whisper in my ear

that you still love me~


this is definately a favorite from you, one I intend to keep

Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle
22 posted 2003-07-22 09:32 AM


"...When December rains a shiver..."

Ohhh, I do like the texture of your writing, BlueSerenade!

I bought my share of mistakes so I might see some interest.
~Dorene

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
23 posted 2003-07-22 09:33 AM


"When December rains a shiver
and the weather starts to storm

Will you come to me at last
and whisper in my ear

that you still love me"

This is great!!
Going in my library.

Martie
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California
24 posted 2003-07-22 09:52 AM


Lori......Romantic, soft, like lace on table.
Well done, as your poetry always is.

gemjop
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Pencilveinia, USA
25 posted 2003-07-22 09:55 AM


If I could gather you around
in shades of autumn leaves

I'd place them one by one
down the center of my peace

You're a beautiful lady, with a beautiful mind to match.

into my library, dear blues. xxxxx

Ramon
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since 2003-07-22
Posts 28

26 posted 2003-07-22 10:02 AM


so singasongy. Beautiful.
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