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I Unwrap |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Tonight reading your words melancholy in soul brought to life I am without even a friend in you as i turn out my light Every track has its verse of how missing you is played Spread the words over time on hands like meadow Full of all the flowers I love even ones I hate I read how you loved me from ink to tear you never lied My rainbow ruby you never change imperfections halt Never gave it you easy spit the truth then gave you the push Worry within confines too far to touch too close not to care Garden of stars where we spent the midnight hours Cigarette sharing content and entwined how I thought i knew it was forever We stumbled laughter filled you were my Christmas whole wanted nothing more If I never see a face like yours feel fingertips explain I'm content in once having Despite the unwrapping of us. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Cigarette sharing content and entwined how I thought i knew it was forever We stumbled laughter filled you were my Christmas whole wanted nothing more If I never see a face like yours feel fingertips explain I'm content in once having Despite the unwrapping of us. ===================================== oh my.. this is a bittersweet beauty.. the last line is impact closing, poetry in motion. a tender render poetess gem, well done. "I'm good at two things and this is the other one." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
geez, you sure know how to make that little tight tingle in my throat and bring water to the edges of my eyes |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"how I thought i knew it was forever" That line right there...is the reason for all my fears.... I loved this. Susan C. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Tonight reading your words melancholy in soul brought to life I am without even a friend in you as i turn out my light Every track has its verse of how missing you is played Oh me, this is so bittersweet and so beautiful! gemma, gemma....this went straight through my heart. Have you read something that makes you want to lay down and cry?? Dang!! Bravo!! Sniff!! Love this!! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Gemma, you have made this big-mouth lady speechless.    [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-17-2003 01:47 PM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome....simply awesome! Chris  "There shall be eternal summer in the grateful heart." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Every track has its verse of how missing you is played this aches ..ughhhhh humans suck |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I feel the same..james |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
You found the right words to describe the void left when love is over.. believe in what your heart feels... [This message has been edited by scorpio (07-17-2003 07:29 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiflly written..I could feel the sadness here. ~Heart Hugs~ ~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~ |
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