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Open Poetry #27
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Amature2
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since 2001-01-08
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0 posted 2003-07-15 11:06 PM


Lonesome Journey

This sadness along
Weighs as heavy
As a granite stone
And stand on the
Other side of darkness
It’s hard to find the door
With this heavy heart
Full with nothing
I streak across the sky
And fragile as it may be
I hope I don't break
The porcelain shadow
Of you

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timothysangel1973
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1 posted 2003-07-15 11:17 PM

Wonderful write Amature!
Tim
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2 posted 2003-07-16 12:20 PM

enjoyed your poem, especially the ending lines.
JaiOfHeaven
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since 2003-04-12
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3 posted 2003-07-16 02:08 AM

Full....of nothing. That is something that is true at times. The only constructive criticism I can give is..never stop writing and write everyday. Don't forget to experiment with new words that you aquire either.
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