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Lost Without You
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Lost Without You |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk 
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Lost without you Keep fighting, the darkness Cast upon my soul, waiting for a touch To shatter, my prison-trapped mind Tears stream outwards, forming rivers of grief Loneliness, grasping air that I breathe A vessel awaits, a chance of escape Dreams coat walls, as I travel back to mind Images flickering, changing all the time Still yet to discover, the meanings they hide A distant memory, flickers into sight The image frozen still, stuck in time There you walk, barefoot brushing the dust Past the scattered roses, a blood stained floor As you approach, my palms flow sweat Breathing heavily, eyes closed tight Wanting your touch, yet pushing you away You’re the reason, I feel this pain inside Yet you still, keep my soul alive The hatred I feel, a forgotten memory brought back to life, each time i try to reclaim The feelings of happiness, which covers the pain inside... Lee Hepworth |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good write n read,,,, A voice of honesty |
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JaiOfHeaven Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 207California, Usa |
You like to offset one thing with another. Like...this is this, that is that. Kinda what I do. I've learned that if you balance this with a single line of your notion...it gives the reader time to dwell on what you've written instead of passing it by so quickly. I liked it though..really brought back memories. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know how this is...good write Lee |
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