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Death by word
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Death by word |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Death by word stricken by her own gifting repeatedly the poet’s words words words dripped down down the page bled the words until the very last and by the lack of language she committed poetic s u i c i d e around tied her found neck were her words Lord save me from myself bend my will to yours let not my own words be used against me [This message has been edited by jellybeans (07-15-2003 01:02 PM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This was brilliant and visual! Susan C. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn....mouth hung open...awesome stuff! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
susan, thank you  I rarely write visual, and this one just sort of formed itselfps...nothing to be in awe of, its just that foot in mouth syndrome that I am plagued with nowadays...sigh |
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Eliza Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 58 |
Let loose the noose... for it wraps too many of us leaving us to twist and turn in sirocco winds |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, my! This is fantastic-I love the way the poem form mirrors the words you say. I wish I could do that. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
Wow, I love this! I love the little prayer at the end, it fits with the rest perfectly..this is amazing =) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A way cool and powerful write. Every poem I read by you is poetic brilliance...truly, if only I could write more like you. Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Eliza, what a perfect comment…..thank you pilgrimage, a few poems just lend themselves to a form, it depends mostly I guess on the metaphor…I only have 4 ‘shaped’ poems out of about 500 that I have written…thank you LilTai, thank you, am glad you enjoyed Honeybee, what a nice compliment, I would never call myself poetically brilliant…*smile* but it was nice of you to |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wow.... I'll forgive you for not sending this one in email ONLY because the format is so spectacular!!! *S* We all need a net at our mouths sometimes... that will bounce some utterances right back down our throats instead of releasing them. Beautiful work, lady! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you lady, two times, was my email to you that brought it to my muse's mind, so you are co-creator *smile* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You conveyed your thoughts very well--both poetically and visually! Warm hugs, EA |
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