Just off Highway 61 (duet with Vicky--vlraynes)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-07-15 06:12 AM

trickle echoes down the rock
in lazy journey with no end
drop the line and sink the cork
a gentle tug, then back again
and take me--where I am at home
grass is tall and time stands still
there I hear myself--in trill---
in joyous song of whippoorwill
In this bobbing of the cork
the peek-a-boo 'tween pool and sky
flies and lightning in my mind
storm clouds gather overhead
I felt the tug upon the hook
and reeled it in to see my prize
nothing but the bait was took--
so I grabbed another worm
watched him squirm in fight for life
as I pushed the hook in him
and denied my part in this...

VOE
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1 posted 2003-07-15 06:15 AM

Now, old fisherwoman that I am, I enjoyed this with complete abandonment!!!!! Great job, and you put me right there by the water, pole in hand.....it's a good day to go fishing!! ~~V~~

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

vlraynes
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2 posted 2003-07-15 06:21 AM

Karen...gawd...I had SO MUCH FUN with this!

Thanks so much for writing with me, and for
being patient with me...you're the best.

Now...when we going to do that again? *grin*

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

suthern

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3 posted 2003-07-15 06:27 AM

Ladies... this is delightful. *S* Going fishing this morning sounds much better than going to work... especially since I could probably go fishing in my parking lot... (Have you been writing rain poems again, witchy one? Claudette's calling cards woke me up. LOL)

Thanks for the escape into memories... you write well together! *S*

wranx
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4 posted 2003-07-15 06:28 AM

Did I tell you that this past Saturday morning the canoe was in the water for all of 60 seconds before I was flipped in a rapid?
Found myself waist-deep and sputtering, a paddle in one hand, a 24oz 7/11 coffee cup full of river water in the other.
Fishing gear (at least what floats) drifting off without me.

5am is too early to fish, I don't care WHAT they say!

Paul Wilson

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5 posted 2003-07-15 07:18 AM

Serenity~ I thought I was your fishing partner. What's the deal? All joking aside
Great job to you and Vicky, Enjoyed very much. Just don't ask me to dig the worms anymore...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2003-07-15 07:29 AM

Hey...

loving all the fisherwomen here.

Vicky?

This was my pleasure--

and the Voice of Experience? smile? You WILL show us the next fishin' hole, won't ya?

gotta love a woman who baits her own hook!

suthern? You'd think I'd sworn off that stuff, huh? grin. but...old habits DO die hard. Hope yer well, m'lovely friend.

And Ed/wranx? I heard something about that trip!! Laughing now, must have fish on the brain...love ya yeti.

and Paulie? tsk tsk tsk. I AM a good ole country girl, after all. And every good ole country girl KNOWS? Throw some dishwater on the ground? and them damned ole worms pop out all by themselves. (*wink* try it sometime...) love ya luvie..

Hugs and kisses all.

and Vicky is a JOY to write with too. GREAT BIG HUGS FOR HER.

Soleil Noir
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7 posted 2003-07-15 08:39 AM

Look at this...I have a feeling you all did every other line - I could be wrong - heaven knows I'm wrong most of the time...LOL...but I enjoyed each and every kerplunk of line...

Hugs to both of you!

Enchantress
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8 posted 2003-07-15 08:50 AM

Wonderful!
I'm not even going to guess as to who wrote what lines...
this is an amazing duet.
AND...I just started bass fishing last summer and I love it..
Can't wait to go in August once again.
~Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
you haven't been listening.~

Edder
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9 posted 2003-07-15 08:58 AM

two women after my own heart...now, where did i put that cane pole?

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2003-07-15 09:08 AM

I wanna come play in the water too!!!

So...which one of you is gonna bait my hook? LOL ...
OH...and I am left handed..which means DUCK when I cast lmao...

very cool you two ...
ya had me hook line and sinker.. WAKKA WAKKA

"I'm good at two things and this is the other one."

C. Jaks

Paula Finn
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11 posted 2003-07-15 09:09 AM

This was the next best thing to being there!

garysgirl

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12 posted 2003-07-15 09:18 AM

Vicky and Karen...I love this!!
I'm a fisherwoman, too...and I can bait my own hook, take the fish off and clean them. Now, I do have one little thing I do...I take an old wash cloth with me to wash the gook off my hands when they get dirty. That's my only quirk about fishing...when the slime gets under my fingernails, it bothers me. But, I love fishing...and eating them too.

Ya'll did good on this poem-story. I couldn't tell who wrote what. Am looking forward to more from ya'll.

Hugs to you both

Ethel

Mysteria

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13 posted 2003-07-15 09:35 AM

Okay I got stuck in the comment that JM is left-handed (so am I - are you?) the Gemini thing? Well now, you did not know this about me but I tie my own flies, can outfish most men as far as fly-fishing goes, and do in fact bait my own hook. So...this great poem by two of my favorite people is going to get framed, and go into my bathroom on the wall with some other fish stories. And brother can I identify with "not claiming your part in it all," as I feel sick everything I catch one and aplogize to its mother LOL

seriously! Love you both and what a dynamic duo are you two anyway, more pahleeezzeee?

Wind

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14 posted 2003-07-15 10:22 AM

you two..you're great..both of you

Don't it allways seem to go,
that you don't know what you've got till' it's gone
-counting crows

Susan Caldwell
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15 posted 2003-07-15 10:26 AM

Interesting, I grew up on the water (fresh), can bait my own hook, and am left handed....

Great duet...

Susan

serenity blaze
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16 posted 2003-07-15 10:39 AM

hmmm.

laughing.

Not sure if I WANNA go fishing with a bunch of left-handed Gemini...

sigh.

There's only one thing I do well with my left hand. *smirk*

and it ain't what ya think!!

(er..or izzit?

)

Hugs, all.

Susan Caldwell
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17 posted 2003-07-15 11:04 AM

Well, I am a cancer...so maybe a bit safer..lol

I may very well write with the left hand...but I can do most everything else with both.....just depends on the reward.

Susan

Martie

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18 posted 2003-07-15 11:06 AM

Karen and Vicky.......always fish with a buddy, I've heard...and this duo was great!! So enjoyed by this fisherwoman....made me even miss that special fregrance of worm on fingers.

jwesley
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19 posted 2003-07-15 11:51 AM

Oh man!  Talk about a huge dose of homesickness!  I've fished, crawfished, tromped the swamps between Moisant (I don't care what they call it now, that's what it is to me) Airport and LaPlace so many times I practically lived there. And that was back in the days before I-10 was put thru - I remember the amazement I felt the first time I came upon I-10 - it was just a "cleared" area in the mist of the swamps near NORCO (didn't know it was there so coming upon it was qujite a shock) of pushed over trees and piled up brush.  I hated it!

We went to Pearl River to see my family couple months ago and drove Airline Hwy from Baton Rouge, through Kenner and Metairie then jumped on I-10 at Causeway Blvd for the rest of the trip.  Wow, what a walk through memories I've nearly forgotten, and much of 61 is still almost pristine in a few areas.

We even stopped and I showed my kids (kids- 20-somethings) and wife where I caught or saw or did so and so, and a lot of things even my wife remembers from the couple of years we lived there together...but I'm getting carried away here and all because of this "thingy" you guy's triggered!

G R E A T    W R I T E !!

jwesley

passing shadows
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20 posted 2003-07-15 01:02 PM

god i loved the ending line! awesome here!

Kielo
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21 posted 2003-07-15 04:05 PM

Wachaaa! Er.... that is to say..... I like it very much!

I wish I could go fishing more often.... (Hey! I'm 16! You're not allowed to make me nostalgic! >.<) lol

Kielo

I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me....

vlraynes
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22 posted 2003-07-15 04:07 PM

Wow...the fun a girl misses when she finally
tries to get a little bit of sleep..lol.

You guys are SO COOL!  Glad you enjoyed our
little fishing trip...so happy you could join us.
And all you left-handed Gemini types...BE CAREFUL!
I think I'm with Karen on that one..lol.

I love you guys so much!  Big thanks and hugs to all of you!

And Karen...gotta say it again...this was so much fun!
You are truly a treat to write with.
Love and hugs to you, lady.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-15-2003 04:08 PM).]

icebox
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23 posted 2003-07-15 05:14 PM

Maybe you could hear a little of Robert Johnson rippling down old 61?

Dark Angel
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24 posted 2003-07-15 05:26 PM

I have no problem baiting my own hook, but I have a problem unhooking the fish lol eeek.

Enjoyed this wonderful duet ladies. Well done both of you.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Janet Marie
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25 posted 2003-07-15 05:31 PM

quote:
There's only one thing I do well with my left hand. *smirk*

NOW THATS IMAGERY!!!!!!!

rofl

(how you like my new sig) yayayayayayaya

"I'm good at two things and this is the other one."

C. Jaks

Nan

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26 posted 2003-07-15 10:16 PM

Um... yeah...

I'm visualizing this... Set the hook - give him some slack... then reel'm in...

vlraynes
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27 posted 2003-07-16 01:34 AM

LOL @ JM.

And Nan...that's the right idea.

Thanks, again, everyone, for such kind comments.
You guys are awesome!

Now...where's my co-writer? Oh, Karen?...
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Midnitesun

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28 posted 2003-07-16 01:43 AM

I enjoyed this duet. But have to say (boo me if you must)....I can't do this at all.
I feel sorry for the bait, and the fish.
(*sigh* guess that's why I'm a vegetarian)

But it's still a very good write, and I loved that ending.

Skyfire

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29 posted 2003-07-16 01:35 PM

Fishing is awesome

So is this poem

Yeah!!!!

vlraynes
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30 posted 2003-07-17 04:08 AM

LOL...I would never 'boo' you, Kacy.
Honestly...I'm such a lover of all life,
that I sometimes struggle with that myself.
But...I still LOVE fishing! LOL

Rhonda...grab your tackle and come along!

Big thanks to you both...glad you enjoyed
this bit of fun. We sure did!
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

JamesMichael
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31 posted 2003-07-17 05:25 AM

Enjoyed...James

JaiOfHeaven
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32 posted 2003-07-17 06:12 AM

Cool

Jai

(....I must really be tired..)

serenity blaze
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33 posted 2003-07-18 03:25 AM

I just wanted to pop in and thank everybody, for the fun and the warm responses. I especially want to thank Vicky--she it total joy, in friendship and in writing.

There were no awkward moments in this one, no arguments over editing because we edited together and both had a clear idea of how we wanted the meter to translate our obvious mutual love of fishing, poetry and self-discovery. She is simply amazing.

Thank you vicky.

Love you lady.

with hugs to all.

vlraynes
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34 posted 2003-07-18 03:05 PM

Right back at you, Karen. Love you too, lady.

Thanks, again, everyone!

"So here I am with pockets full of good intentions
But none of them will comfort me tonight..." ~Carpenters

Earth Angel
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35 posted 2003-07-18 03:36 PM

Gosh, this was really goooood! Having been an avid fishergirl and then later an avid fisherwoman, I enjoyed this poetic collaboration!--and on a literary level, being a writer of poetry myself and one who is appreciative of the fine works of others, I enjoyed this dynamite duet!

Warm hugs to you both!
Linda

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