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An Ode To Everyone Else
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An Ode To Everyone Else |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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How freely judgment rolls from tongues and quills without the benefit of the story A jury of gods and monsters of bishops and whores who whisper always who whisper nothing I spit the bitter taste of what you call 'friendship' the truth lies between the two I'll see the rest of you in hell [This message has been edited by Aenimal (07-14-2003 09:16 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Careful now Raph~ Not that I misunderstood your words, (quite the contrary)....I just don't want to see you locked up. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-14-2003 09:41 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Blues is it just the use of the word whore? I just used it to counter bishop it's not intented to be a literal attack on anyone or is it something else? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow....this is raw, yet, extremely well expressed. Good for you, Raph...the truth always wins in the end, though the way there may feel like hell. Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Uh huh, I know all about those little voices... and word whores, she wrote a couple of my poems when I wasn't looking! Gotta cover our bases somehow, right? |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Goodness, Raph. Who did something to you? This is hard.... I spit the bitter taste of what you call 'friendship' the truth lies between the two I'll see the rest of you in hell Sounds to me like you're telling everybody to go there!?! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Poetically 'whore' should be acceptable. Yes, it is perhaps a word used for shock value, but, it has been effectively and powerfully used within the context of your message, Raph. In my opinion and in many dictionaries, 'whore' can also mean lewd, corrupted or a debauchery of life. And of course, it's most common meaning - of prostituting oneself...which doesn't always have to be for sex. I like the way you used it here. Besides, if the mods lock this poem, they are hypocrites because I have seen a plethora of other respected poets here use far worse words and images. Okay, so I rambled, but, I seriously think that you have nothing to worry about...your poem should be safe. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
well now. I could ask you, what someone asked ME last week: "who's been sprinkling yer cornflakes?" (paraphrased) Smile. A powerful poem, Raph. I KNOW this feeling quite well. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks Melissa and yes I don't think there's anything wrong with the usage either but who knows. The truth doesn't always wind but i couldn't care less with these words I've detached myself from the outcome high school was over a long time ago Lol Blues..well appreciate the concern if anybody feels it should be pulled then maybe we should post nothing but roses are red poems NO NO Ethel only those who've had the nerve to comment on something that's none of their business I know yer going to heaven lol put in a good word for me ok Thanks K..percocet and cornflake..mm goodness [This message has been edited by Aenimal (07-14-2003 09:54 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I'll see the rest of you in hell"---don't be in too much of a hurry to get there! I hear hell is HELL!  You love that line you walk, don't you! Yes, shock does have value! LOL  Warm hugs & a smile, EA |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
sorry, im not so sure that you belong there...but who am i to pass judgement?  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Linda I'm not afriad of it I think i'm already there most days Koko thanks grins |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
oouch, this bites, like an attack dog that wont let go, ive been there myself recently |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
who whisper nothing |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I'm just here, that's all |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Oh this bites, hard, at the fingertips of anyone who should cross you. well said. It truly kicks ass does this. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
who whisper always who whisper nothing I am slowly learning that those who do this are not worth the hateful feelings they tend to breed...better off just feeling sorry for them. *s M |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I enjoyed this poem-it's raw and bitter and powerfully written. The bishops and whores line is good, but I especially like the 'I'll see the rest of you in hell' line. Real emotion can certainly bleed over into an outstanding poem. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks all, just a vent..i'm done.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Aenimal, will you hold my hand in hell? |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Raph - noted your comment on the use of your verbiage - in this context, I see nothing wrong with it... as for the poem? It stands alone, m'friend... and it does it on two legs. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
My name it is Sam Hall... damn your eyes... ouch raph...been there.... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ok Susan but i wanr you they get a little sweaty Thanks Soliel Noir very kind words Aye LR we've all been there but I'd hoped it ended with high school..ah well |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Damn. Raph... talk about intense. Remind me not to upset you. Since I'll probably get there before you, I'll be sure to save you a primo seat... somewhere near the dancing girls and booze We see the light of those |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I don't mind not going to heaven...as long as they've got cigarettes in hell ~ Oasis Not that i smoke anymore but what does it mater down there..beer and a stogey fine by me |
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Carolina Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 224Myrtle Beach, SC |
wondering if I should sell tickets at the gate?  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Damn.. I'm adding this to my library. |
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