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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-07-14 05:06 PM



Funny how
I took down the photographs
long before the end

Yet still
you hang ugly as most expensive art
in forefront of mind

Since we
didn't last the forever wanted
then why should

this long and winding ache.

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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2003-07-14 05:07 PM


kid...the ache lasts a lot longer than it should, but it does get better...

nice piece...

Kaoru
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2 posted 2003-07-14 05:09 PM


Beautiful piece!


Edder
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3 posted 2003-07-14 06:14 PM


"Since we
didn't last the forever wanted
then why should

this long and winding ache."

wow! this really grabbed me. you nailed it.

x8x_bigmike
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4 posted 2003-07-14 06:24 PM


8 weeks later, it hits me more when i dream than anything...when forever is a rational thought, the loss of forever seems to stick with you through the rest of your life...but for me its the fuel for my poetry...the longer time passes the more you remember the good over the bad if you were truly in love...

i emphathize though...

Mike

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5 posted 2003-07-14 06:25 PM


Gem- this one is perfect. too badd you can't just wave your wand and make him go 'poof'
~The shivering peanut~

Don't it allways seem to go,
that you don't know what you've got till' it's gone
-counting crows

scorpio
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right...there
6 posted 2003-07-14 08:10 PM


Very descriptively emotional poem..

believe in what your heart feels...

Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-07-14 08:37 PM


It doesn't last forever, just long enough for you to believe it will. Ache and then remember to live..your friend

Hyp O. Crit

inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2003-07-14 11:13 PM


i like the ache, actually,
isnt that weird?

Honeybee
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9 posted 2003-07-14 11:30 PM


How I relate....this is exceptionally well penned, I love your unique style and images.

This is a keeper~

Melissa

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Janet Marie
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10 posted 2003-07-14 11:47 PM


Yet still
you hang ugly as most expensive art
in forefront of mind


=========================

Whoa ... and wow ... and damn.
poetic impact and irony at its succinct best.
well done poetess gem.

Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first.

(bumper sticker humor) ;)

littlewing
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11 posted 2003-07-15 01:11 AM


ahh gem gem - that ache . . . God
you know some days I wake up and still think I am at home.  I dont know how long that ache lasts and what it will take to get rid of it but I do know how you feel and can empathize very much so.  I guess one of two things:

1.  we find something or someone else to take our minds off of it
2.  we take more meds
lol ok seriously . . . I was serious
awesome lines missy
xxoo

ctowen
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12 posted 2003-07-15 02:02 AM


The ache is what makes it real

    ...if only the other side ached as well.
                

                take two of these
                                

                 and hug me in the morning!

                       oxoxox

passing shadows
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13 posted 2003-07-15 02:17 AM


just a beautifully sad write gemma...you know I can understand
vlraynes
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14 posted 2003-07-15 02:20 AM



Wow...powerfully, yet beautifully said, gemma.
Nicely done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

vandana
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15 posted 2003-07-15 06:19 PM


enjoyed
Old_Shoe_New_Laces
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16 posted 2003-07-15 07:42 PM


I know well the infinite ache.  The first stanza made this work for me.  Enjoyed.
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