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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2003-07-14 03:12 PM

I’m driving today with eyes on the road
pretending I know the right way to go
but a corner appears, I turn, I am lost,
and I slow to debate my profit and loss.

I asked for a torch, legs to run the last lap,
and the used once before remains of a map,
not the moon and the stars, a call from afar,
or a stop/starting heart like an old motorcar.

I’m driving today with eyes on the road
overfilled with the burdens of soul.
If only, if only, I packed lightly the trunk
and eliminated love as unnecessary junk.

And now am I blessed, cursed, or discarded
or merely regarded as the dearly departed
still breathing the air of forward/reverse
in the perverse atmosphere of this universe?

In my haste to arrive I’m always too late,
from youth to old age there’s always heartache,
but each mountain, hill, dale, slows me enough
to appreciate love … and get through the rough!

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2003-07-14 04:47 PM

Helen

"In my haste to arrive I’m always too late,
from youth to old age there’s always heartache,
but each mountain, hill, dale, slows me enough
to appreciate love … and get through the rough!"

Your poetry always has a message that speaks to me...and I thank you for that.

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

2 posted 2003-07-14 05:18 PM

Woo.. This is a great write!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-07-14 08:24 PM

If only, if only, I packed lightly the trunk
and eliminated love as unnecessary junk.

And now am I blessed, cursed, or discarded
or merely regarded as the dearly departed

Such a fine writer you are!
(But you knew that already)

Fantastic read, Helen dear!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2003-07-15 12:43 PM

Hello Martie, Thank you for your kind comment and for your lovely poem. I'll be in touch soon.

Kaoru - I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Bluesy!! Thanks for commenting and for your much appreciated encouragement. I just write what I feel and if it comes out alright, well, then I can move on to whatever emotion or thought is still waiting for my attenton. Take care!

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