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On The Road Of Life |
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poet25 Junior Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 18PE, Canada |
Quitely I sit at an intersection Watching the disgruntled drivers pass by Even the most simplistic of smiles have been stricken from their faces They all semm to be alone Busily rushing from nowhere to nowhere Their lives no different from that of a ant's life Each face seems plagued with sorrow Perplexed as to why they did not do things differently Try as they might to drown these thoughts out Nothing will ever truly make them subside Each pair of eyes cross my path for at least a moment Every glance feels the same, they look at me as if I am crazy Simply because I sit here and write I write the story of their lives Sadly I only need a few words To tell this sad tale Thank you very much for reading my poem, I hope you enjoyed reading it, I would much appreciate any comments or critiques anyone might have it will be much appreciated and taken in good humour, thank you and have a lovely day. |
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VOE Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 119From the land of Camelot |
Oh, I have done exactly what you focused on here....many times!! A poet will find inspiration in moments around him/her, and I too have found it in the faces of people going to and fro in their busy lives. Bravo, this is great insight, from the soul of a poet!! I speak from the Voice Of Experience |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Writers, especially, would pen something of this - for the ones with the sad faces simply do not have a pen in their hand, and if they did, chances are, they would be irritated at not being able to express their thoughts completely. You asked how to make this better - and I will only suggest a spell check - as I almost went by this one because of a misspelled word - but saw that you were open to comment - and wanted to share that one little thing with you. Thank you. |
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poet25 Junior Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 18PE, Canada |
Thank you very much voe, what you say is quite true if only the whole world were able to capture their emotion, instead of bottling it behind their eyes. Thank you sunshine, I just like to write raw so I do not always get the chance to doa speel check, but it is people like yourself that help people like me take notice of the simplest errors. |
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