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Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

0 posted 2003-07-13 06:01 PM

I fought hard but she
fights dirty, tossed out the rules
asked, for an answer

My answer is this
Do you want me if broken?
if my love is a token?
of promises broken
by whispers unspoken

If your needs would destroy me
but my needs are just empty
would you walk away angry
from a coward who hates me

no strings attached
says the woman who owns me
yet chains do I feel
from the woman who's

grown me

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-07-13 06:06 PM

Glad you expanded..brilliant

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-07-13 06:18 PM

This may be the first time anyone has had the courage to write this topic...
Brilliant is the right word! TD

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

3 posted 2003-07-13 06:29 PM

rules?

there are rules?

eh?

beg forgiveness
without excuses
or explanations
only
apologize

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-07-13 07:50 PM

Happy your muse took over Jason - this is one awesome write . . .
I am enjoying watching you shine
xxoo

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2003-07-13 10:08 PM

Oops! WATCH OUT!

Runaway pen!

Looks like yer muse has a mind of her own

*chuckling*

Nice write Jason

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

6 posted 2003-07-13 10:09 PM

Wonderful write...glad you decided to keep it going once you got started.

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

7 posted 2003-07-14 01:04 AM

I really did enjoy reading this one.

Big fun.

Sun of faith
Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 101

8 posted 2003-07-14 01:09 AM

awesome write my friend, stay true

Sun of faith
Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 101

9 posted 2003-07-14 01:10 AM

awesome write my friend, stay true

Sun of faith
Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 101

10 posted 2003-07-14 01:10 AM

awesome write my friend, stay true

Sun of faith
Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 101

11 posted 2003-07-14 01:10 AM

awesome write my friend, stay true

Sun of faith
Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 101

12 posted 2003-07-14 01:10 AM

nice write, stay true

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2003-07-14 01:46 AM

good stuff

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