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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-13 03:24 PM


To feel the pressure
As you calmly drop on me
I can barely breathe.

© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 2003-07-13 04:02 PM


God you know - this is amazing . . .
bittersweet indeed
awesome writing
xxoo

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2003-07-14 08:51 PM


Interesting, how the pressure effects our breathing.  

Nice haiku, you~

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-07-14 09:07 PM


This can read a few ways..

a haunting act of force
a beautiful act inspiring breathlessness
or having a really fat lover

Excellent either way grins

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4 posted 2003-07-14 09:14 PM


LOL at Raph's reply

he made me forget my comment!

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