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Open Poetry #27

Ode to Love

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

0 posted 2003-07-13 05:48 AM

Love, this daily tract
I held you once in my arms.
Love, more than life, light, beam
more than spiral, more than turn.
Planted in the trace of me,
so do I narrate your gift, I
sounding pit, I tread, hope,
fallow field.  You be the time,
I move, round, drink.
You be the light, I
generation, dog day,
shadow play.  You be mercy,
I condition, transition.
I branch, you tree, leafed.

You dimension,
I reaction
being.

ANNOUNCING! my novel COOL UNIVERSE is now posted
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[This message has been edited by mirror man (07-13-2003 05:50 AM).]

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-07-13 06:05 AM

Beautiful expression, very cool style.
Enjoyed this alot

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2003-07-13 07:50 AM

I condition, transition.
I branch, you tree, leafed.

yes, youve stripped it to the root
very cool and creative

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (07-13-2003 07:51 AM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2003-07-13 09:25 AM

Very nice and powerful cadence!
Love, Margherita

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2003-07-13 06:05 PM

mirror man....one of your best...very much enjoyed!

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

5 posted 2003-07-14 08:18 AM

I have felt this way. I like the way you wrote this...

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