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Wind
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0 posted 2003-07-12 06:45 PM



You remind me,
of every grain of sand
I let slip
through my hands

take a look in the mirror

You're a ghost-
I knew it all along,
It's why I built the grave in advance.
Your hands are so cold,
you've been dead too long
to feel anything.

What have we become?

Match me-
word for word,
you're just a politician,
trying to force me to your side

you've got me tied at the crossroads

My feet bleed
from walking
on glass
too long.

Now it's your turn


If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes


[This message has been edited by Wind (07-12-2003 06:55 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Liz - All Rights Reserved
Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-07-12 06:53 PM


Well written, really love your work
gemjop
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2 posted 2003-07-12 07:05 PM


oh myyyy word. i just died inside reading that. stop being psychic.

You remind me,
of every grain of sand
I let slip
through my hands

take a look in the mirror

oh you just know i know this.   i love wallowing in self pity. dont you?

you've got me tied at the crossroads

My feet bleed
from walking
on glass
too long.

Now it's your turn


i know i just quoted practically the whole poem, but liz, i swear this hits me hard. SUCH a talented lady you are. I've been waiting for this post allll day, and i'm not disappointed.

Wind
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3 posted 2003-07-12 07:08 PM


you know me Gem- strictly one post a day. There is another one somewere that you missed, but I won't make you chase it. I knew youed feel this one Gemmy, that's why I posted it.

Meg, thanks, I love your poems too

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2003-07-12 07:12 PM


"My feet bleed from walking on glass too long.  Now it's your turn."
Reminded me of something an ex said to me one time...but not as dramatically as this...James

gemjop
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5 posted 2003-07-12 09:45 PM


re reading...sigh...aaaargh the pain. its 3 am here! i've just realised. whats up with me?
Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-07-12 09:48 PM


Like this..a little anger a little bitterness..yes yes..
Wind
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7 posted 2003-07-12 09:49 PM


its only 9:30 over here... sometimes I wished I lived in Europe Then people would stop making fun of me and saying I only listen to British music? LOL GO TO BED.

to save you time, I'll answer for you "yes mum"

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

Wind
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8 posted 2003-07-12 09:50 PM


bloody hell, Raph is here Thanks bud, too busy replying to gem to see you

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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9 posted 2003-07-12 09:53 PM


yeah, I know about those ghosts
Wind
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10 posted 2003-07-12 09:53 PM


you make me smile Dixie

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

Aenimal
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11 posted 2003-07-12 10:05 PM


yeah yeah just ignoring me..sniff sniff..
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12 posted 2003-07-12 10:12 PM


Goodnight GerRaph, I'm going to bed BEFORE three. I would never ignore you. How COULD I?

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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