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Martie

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0 posted 2003-07-11 09:23 PM

She stands
watching the hill
sniffing the burning sage
her fur ruffled by hot dry wind
alone

Shadows
cast by night’s moon
touching a strand of trees
a song that is coyote born
in dark

Searching
for shade or glade
there is nowhere to hide
waving water has been licked dry
no rain

[This message has been edited by Martie (07-12-2003 01:40 PM).]

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2003-07-11 09:27 PM

ouch...

I'd tell you too, to write a rain dance, but it DOES haunt ya...

(you are quite the witchy sister tho!)

I followed every footstep in this one.

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2003-07-11 09:58 PM

Life is not always kind, but how resilient the coyotte...as all of nature is inborn to survive. Hugs, TD

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3 posted 2003-07-12 12:21 PM

Coyotes are made for this, but that doesn't mean they don't feel it.

You draw this picture so well -- I'd say paint, but paint is wet, and there's nothing wet here! On all levels, this is one excellent poem. Somehow you let us see that coyote from the inside as well as the outside.

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S Arthur Grey
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4 posted 2003-07-12 01:11 AM

then he
watching her search
answers across the smoke
and dawn finds both aside the hill
waiting

s.a.g.

Bill Charles
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5 posted 2003-07-12 01:15 AM

Martie - words as only you can write...

BC

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6 posted 2003-07-12 08:51 AM

I know the sight of waving water...excellent imagery Martie. You took me home...and I felt the heat.

Goodknight
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7 posted 2003-07-12 12:02 PM

Martei - you write the feelings and thoughts of the coyote - you take us to see the angst and pain it feels - your poetry is just amazing - Paul

garysgirl

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8 posted 2003-07-12 12:07 PM

Martie, what a beautiful poem...though it
does make me feel sorry for the animals.
And, Lady, I love the form, too. You do
everything you write, perfectly. I hope that
you don't mind me keeping it to study?

Hugs

Ethel

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9 posted 2003-07-12 12:15 PM

hi.. i like this piece a lot. my minds eye sees a ruffled scragly coyote, but a glint of something special in its eyes. a certain amount of awareness that few animals (and even people) can posses.

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10 posted 2003-07-12 12:38 PM

what a picture you paint here, and i love staring

I will have to study this form of poetry, thanks for something new

Margherita
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11 posted 2003-07-12 01:54 PM

Very beautiful, dear Martie!
Love, Margherita

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12 posted 2003-07-12 04:16 PM

I read this earlier and could have sworn I replied, but apparantly I didn't lol. Great write, I love the way you captured the mood of the scene

icebox
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13 posted 2003-07-12 04:26 PM

*smile*

A great poem about an interesting animal....There are good reasons why broyher Coyote is identified with the trickster.

I have started to see them in my town here in the east. They trail the wild turkeys which showed up two years ago. Some times hunters support good deeds.

The Coyote is beginning to seem like my daughter's totem, more time though is needed.

Thank you for sharing this.

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14 posted 2003-07-12 04:27 PM

Martie...love this and love you.
Hugs to you, friend.
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Dark Angel
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15 posted 2003-07-12 06:32 PM

These are terrific cinquains Martie... enjoyed them very much m'lady

Maree

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16 posted 2003-07-13 03:32 PM

Your imagery is so vivid I can feel the parch... and cannot swallow for lack of wet. Simply excellent!

a song that is coyote born
in dark

These lines make it particularly poignant for me... having heard coyote song just this weekend. *S*

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17 posted 2003-07-13 04:06 PM

incredible imagery Martie

I could feel the heat, and the dry throat.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-13-2003 04:07 PM).]

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