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Wind
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0 posted 2003-07-11 10:19 AM



Sometimes things happen.
Sometimes I sit and watch.

I'm fighting a losing battle

Time hates me,
I’d like to
smash its face,
Ties its hands behind it

It’s only simple mechanics,
as my life is ticking away
And they say
that time can save you,
As if watching the clocks stare
will do something

And clocks would save me

If I had the time


If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

[This message has been edited by Wind (07-12-2003 04:33 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-07-11 10:21 AM


Awesome write, great timing
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2 posted 2003-07-11 10:24 AM


Thanks, looks like we replied to each others poems at the same time. But the alphebetical thing is against me I appreciate your reply

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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3 posted 2003-07-11 10:31 AM


Liz, that was brill!--with a twist of lemon!
This is a gem of a poem and it is a

Loves 'n huggums,
EA

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4 posted 2003-07-11 10:36 AM


I'll have one of those EA. You're a keeper too

If art is still inside, I feel it
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5 posted 2003-07-11 10:53 AM


if I had time..and a brain..I'd say more..
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6 posted 2003-07-11 12:24 PM


"If I only had a brain..." You are smart, just not great with comebacks. Thanks for replying Capitan

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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7 posted 2003-07-11 04:38 PM


I have the song Airbag stuck in my head. This happens a lot. Just random songs

If art is still inside, I feel it
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8 posted 2003-07-11 05:19 PM


We are always running with time. Time to do this, time to do that. Time heals all wounds.
Time to get up, time to go to bed, time to eat, time to take a bath,time marches on.
We even have sayings like Time stood still
It is time for all good people......
Gee I don't have enough TIME to keep on writing. LOL.
Good one.
Bon-Bon

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9 posted 2003-07-11 05:20 PM


Thanks Bonbon, you cheered me up

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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10 posted 2003-07-12 07:16 PM


Time hates me,
I’d like to
smash its face,
Ties its hands behind it


haunting stuff. shiver me timbers. you always make me want to quote the whole poem ya little tinker. the part about wtching the clocks stare, as if it would help. and the ending. time, i've had my fair share of bad timings, and things happening at bad times, how time can break your heart. sigh. time should be banned. would that work? glad you told me i'd missed one. tsk, if i'd have known, i wouldnt have been waiting allll day..in the true style of liz >>>>

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11 posted 2003-07-12 07:20 PM


hehe, you did me a favor by bumping it anyway. There's two types of poems that I write:

shiver poems, that scare the heck out of the romantics, that are often dark and sad

Gumdrop poems, which result from me reading your mind

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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12 posted 2003-07-12 07:34 PM


Chilling....nice read...hope time is on your side....

Anwaar


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13 posted 2003-07-12 07:39 PM


Anwaar- your reply reminds me of a song..that hopefully I won't start singing LOL, thanks

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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14 posted 2003-07-12 07:40 PM



Liz...I LOVE this...very creative write.
Hugs,
~Vicky

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you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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15 posted 2003-07-12 07:40 PM


Thanks Vicky. Haven't seen you for a while?

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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16 posted 2003-07-12 09:11 PM


And clocks would save me

If I had the time

intelligent, interesting write here. damn, that feeling, like nothing could save you, even going back in time. nicely said.

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17 posted 2003-07-12 09:30 PM


Hey Dylan, welcome. I love it when new members have the courdasy to reply to other's poems

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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18 posted 2003-07-12 09:44 PM


And clocks would save me

If I had the time


Liz, I like this.


"If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room
in my mind & slam the door on it." Gary~  Heart hugs, Ethel

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19 posted 2003-07-12 09:52 PM


Ethel, your words mean a lot to me. I love that dispite our obvious differences in writing styles, we still appreciate each others poems. lov ya Ethel Mae

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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20 posted 2003-07-12 09:59 PM


Time hates me,
I’d like to
smash its face,

You take the face I'll kick him in the ...uh..you know..grin Loved that line..yes loved i used the L word..phblllllt

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21 posted 2003-07-12 10:03 PM


Thank you Raph..I found your soft spot

NEENER NEENER NEENER!

If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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22 posted 2003-07-12 10:07 PM


"Time hates me,
I’d like to
smash its face,
Ties its hands behind it

It’s only simple mechanics,
as my life is ticking away"
_________________________

*Shaking my head here in awe of your talent.*  I still can't believe that someone your age can write so powerfully and maturely of the dark and of life.  Girl, if only you knew how I relate to the above lines.  I'm keeping this.  And I usually say 'DAMN' to Raph's poetry...well your poem deserves a DAMN!

Melissa~

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23 posted 2003-07-12 10:10 PM


hehe honey, Raph usualy pretends to be British and says "bloody hell" but I got him to use the "L" word. Thanks.

(Tanks a lot Anwaar. You've got another song stuck in my head I'm chuckfull O' lyrics)


If art is still inside, I feel it
-Aaron Lewes

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24 posted 2003-07-13 02:35 AM


Liz, you're just so talented, it amazes me at times, so wise in your youth
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25 posted 2003-07-13 07:38 PM


amazing.....i loved it, i LOVED it, it was great.....inspiring, i loved it!!!!! great write liz, i missed reading stuff you wrote...


riley

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26 posted 2003-07-13 07:55 PM


hey Ri, thanks

Don't it allways seem to go,
that you don't know what you've got till' it's gone
-counting crows

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27 posted 2003-07-13 10:19 PM


great lines gal...there is surely wonder behind your muse, and pen!

I really enjoyed this

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28 posted 2003-07-13 10:46 PM


"Time hates me,
I’d like to
smash its face,
Ties its hands behind it

It’s only simple mechanics,
as my life is ticking away
And they say
that time can save you,
As if watching the clocks stare
will do something"

I do like the way you think Liz.  Very cool write...

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