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anwaarhassan
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0 posted 2003-07-11 09:56 AM




I wrote this poem based on conversations with my daughter who is seven years old. This poem is for her.


A Child's Lament


Hello God! Can you hear me up there
I need to talk because I know you care.
I have to whisper ....I’m not supposed to shout
Because that’s why Mom put me on “time out”.
Well it must be nice up there in heaven
But down here, life’s not fair for a girl of seven.
It started when Mom lay in the hospital bed
And came home with brother and not me instead.
Four more long years I lived in her tummy
Before she decided to be my Mommy.
Okay, it’s true when I was zero years old
She hugged me close so I wouldn’t be cold.
But then one day when I was waiting to be fed
She shoved in my mouth a bottle instead
And when I lay in bed, busy at play,
Dad decided that I must “sit up” that day.
And it wasn’t enough that I could “sit” and “talk”
It was time for me to learn to “walk”.
Oh so many times I would fall and cry
But they kept saying, “Sweet heart, Try..Try”.
And when I cried so my diaper could be changed
Guess what! Now I must be “potty-trained”.
It didn’t get any better when I started school
Only a lot more work seems to be the rule.
And if homework wasn’t bad enough
I now must do chores and other stuff.
And when I say so much work isn’t fair
It seems as if they just don’t care
But here is something I don’t understand
Before I go to sleep they hold my hand
And as I close my eyes they whisper in my ear,
You’re the love of our life… sleep well my dear.






[This message has been edited by anwaarhassan (07-13-2003 07:38 PM).]

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suthern
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1 posted 2003-07-11 12:06 PM


This is a delightful look from another perspective... well done! *S*
Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-07-11 01:42 PM


This one really tugged at my harp strings.

Great to see your smiling face, Anwaar!


EA

LeeJ
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3 posted 2003-07-11 01:43 PM


simply the way of a poetic life...lovely thoughts you have shared here...thank you
anwaarhassan
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4 posted 2003-07-11 01:46 PM


Suthern, LeeJ & EarthAngel,
Thank you for your comments.

Anwaar

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5 posted 2003-07-11 01:53 PM


anwaar...Yhis is so nice. The mind of a child is so special. I'm sure she enjoyed this poem and hope that she remembers it always.Thanks for allowing me to read this poem, it brought a smile to my face...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

Munda
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6 posted 2003-07-11 02:16 PM


Your poem left me smiling. Thanks.
anwaarhassan
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7 posted 2003-07-11 05:11 PM


Munda,
Thank you for reading my poem...appreciate it.

Paul,
  Yes she likes it and I am going to keep this for her until she grows up. Most of the phrases and words, such as "not fair", "zero years old", "living in Mommy's tummy" were taken verbatim from her...Thanks for the read!!

Anwaar

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