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Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
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Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2003-07-09 11:44 PM



Yours are the screams
that make my ears bleed.
My dreams,
incomplete,
disassemble at the seams.

These are the reasons I can't see:
the living world is blind to me.
They are their own important things,
self-fulfilling prophecies.

The places we prefer to leave,
like twisted nightmare fantasies,
drag us into morbid gloom,
sequester us in death and doom,
steal our breath, outside our throats,
in hopes that it will make us choke.

We aren't the promises you broke.
We can't be blown away like smoke.
We are thoughts your truth forsook,
premature antidotes
you took.
We are wiser words, unsaid,
that rot,
forgotten,
in your head.
This is the poison that thins you out,
takes everything you have but doubt,
lets you lie awake and wait
while the hourglass drags you
to your grave.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

© Copyright 2003 Shay D. - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-07-10 12:00 PM


Hey you.

I'm glad you stuck around.

I might never have gotten around to reading you, but I'm certainly glad that I did.

I loved the last verse. It had the feel of anthem for rebel. Something kind of partial to my OWN heart.

Make you a deal? You stick around, and if I'm here? I'll look for you.

smile.

Sometimes it's just a case of "so many poets, so little time..."

So glad I popped in.

Thank you for the read.


Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

2 posted 2003-07-10 12:29 PM


ooo:
"This is the poison that thins you out,
takes everything you have but doubt,
lets you lie awake and wait
while the hourglass drags you
to your grave."
There is SOME kinda strong message goin' on here...I think I get it....

Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2003-07-10 01:14 AM


interesting write, the last few lines are intense, vivid
that's good, as it makes the reader really READ and think about what the author's intent was
good 'poison' makes ya think

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