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Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

0 posted 2003-07-09 11:06 PM


I got a new toy
it buzzes
and dings


I remember
my fathers
heel
crushing it

my first memory

thank God
my memory is

intact


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ecrivan
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1 posted 2003-07-09 11:10 PM


thank the Lord...cute and meaningful


littlewing
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2 posted 2003-07-09 11:40 PM


Jason:

I must say I am basking in the glow of your muse . . .

this is amazing . . .
xxoo

Aenimal
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3 posted 2003-07-10 07:42 AM


I woke up this morning cause I had to come to this i read it last night but didn't have time to reply. Maybe I'm completely off, sometimes my personal experiences seep into my interpretations, but I thought people missed the point. I didn't see a cute accident but an intentional act of destruction on your father's part and the wound of such a memory. What do I know

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (07-10-2003 07:46 AM).]

Patricia
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Missouri
4 posted 2003-07-10 08:04 AM


Jason,

I enjoyed this...yes, I believe it can be taken two ways. I'd like to think that you meant you still have the lovely memory of it even though it does not exist anymore...simply because it is an optimistic way of looking at things.  On the other hand, I have been working through some pain in my poetry...so, if that is what you intended, that, too, is very positive!

In any case, this is an excellent write.  

Patricia

Sunshine
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5 posted 2003-07-10 08:48 AM



I read this earlier - and agree with Raph's interpretation.  An early childhood memory - intact - leaves me wondering if the father attempted a peace - a resolution to past ill will - but the memory is intact, and forgiveness is not yet ready to be broached on one of the two sides of the memory.

Very good, Jason.

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-07-10 10:03 AM


Yes Raph - exactly what I saw it was quite disturbing but an awesome write indeed
Basking in the glow of his muse - it has come back to grace . . . after he abused it of course LOL

[This message has been edited by littlewing (07-10-2003 10:04 AM).]

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438
With my darkling
7 posted 2003-07-10 04:56 PM


As sad as it is, this is truelly my earliest memory.I guess I was being a little sarcastic thanking God for the memory.I think I was about three.And the toy was simply in his way.The first of a long string of "great memories"
And Karilea? it is him that is not ready for the healing, still in denial and such a jerk my kids dont go over without me.Thanks for reading friends, I swear I will try a happy write for you all soon.

Jason

Gina Culliney
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8 posted 2003-07-10 05:31 PM


Thought provoking and very sobering.  What
impact human beings have on each other positive or negative.  Beautifully and hauntingly penned, Darkling.

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