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Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-07-09 11:02 PM

Through night’s vastness
known as midsummer’s sky,
a comet flew like a skipping rock
across a placid pond,
breaking the serenity
of a trillion anchored stars,
leaving a trail of rippled trace,
in, but not in night’s firmament,
as if someone had scratched
the glass of a photograph
not marring, but magnifying
the beauty therein.
With eyes transfixed in wait
for rebirth of comet’s blaze,
came Luna’s crawl,
floating across midsummer sky
like a mother duck asleep
on the water as her ducklings
surround her in bubbling effervescence,
in, but not in night’s firmament,
as if a radiant gem were to
drift across a photograph.
A slivered moon and shooting star,
both in, and not in heaven’s high,
a part, and not a part of the splendor
of midsummer’s sky.

[This message has been edited by Tim (07-10-2003 09:27 PM).]

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

1 posted 2003-07-09 11:08 PM

"Through night’s vastness
known as midsummer’s sky,
a comet flew like a skipping rock
across a placid pond,
breaking the serenity
of a trillion anchored stars,"

One of the best poetic openings I can recall!

Excellent. Thank you for sharing it.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2003-07-09 11:08 PM

Oh, lovely. And lovely structure too. I like this.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-07-09 11:19 PM

...and if you blink...
it's gone.

Excellent imagery...

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-07-09 11:45 PM

This poem was,
and was not,
no, it was,
a piece of
p-e-r-f-e-c-t-i-o-n!

EA

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2003-07-10 12:03 PM

Tim...one of you best!

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

6 posted 2003-07-10 12:24 PM

This is pure art:
"Through night’s vastness
known as midsummer’s sky,
a comet flew like a skipping rock
across a placid pond,
breaking the serenity
of a trillion anchored stars,
while leaving a trail of rippled trace"
but actually I loved the entire write and am saving it, thank you.

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

7 posted 2003-07-10 08:30 AM

Tim,

My mind embraces so many wonderful images with you words.

A wonderful write!

Patricia

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

8 posted 2003-07-10 10:54 AM

wonderful images Tim , visual perfection
expressing magical nights reflection

Hope

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

9 posted 2003-07-13 11:29 PM

Wonderful images here Tim. Thanks for sharing your talent with us.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2003-07-14 04:12 AM

I can see this clearly, and it's beautiful

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

11 posted 2003-07-14 04:18 AM

Tim...I always love reading your poetry,
and this is no exception.
Absolutely beautiful, my friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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