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My First Post, My First Poem
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My First Post, My First Poem |
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LukeatNFFC Junior Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 42Nottingham, England |
Hello everyone. I'm fifteen years old, and this is my first poem on this board. Constructive Criticisms Welcome. WARNING: May be a touchy subject for some. Apologies. Death- Every breath I had taken, He had taken with me, Watching, Waiting, Following, Longingly he whispered, Instructions to my ear, Carrying me along, Through life and through my fear, To pearly gates, To open straights, He knew the way, I followed. I knew the way, He followed. |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Hello Luke and welcome to the forums! Very nice first post. Do you mean that this is the first poem you have ever written? I think you have talent. Keep on writing and nice to meet you!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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LukeatNFFC Junior Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 42Nottingham, England |
When i say first poem i mean the first poem i've written without being forced into it at school... |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
That's what I consider to be my first poem too! Anyway keep writing. ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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altoladybj Member
since 2003-06-24
Posts 79Pennsylvania |
Hi Luke, I think this is a very good first post. Welcome to PIP. I look forward to reading more of your poems. Beverly |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome, Luke. Hope you enjoy your time here, and check out all the different forums available.  |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Nice post! Welcome to pip. Jason |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
First post, and this good...... Folks, we got ourseves a live one! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Luke  I'm really glad that you decided to join us here....did you say you've been writing for 15 years????LOL  Seriously, this is really good and I look forward to reading more of your poems. And welcome to PIP.  "If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room in my mind & slam the door on it." Gary~ Heart hugs, Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-09-2003 02:50 PM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
 Beautiful first post Luke. Lovely sentiments. Looking forward to seeing more. love gemma xxx |
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Purple Poet On Wheels Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 145Pittsburgh/Edinboro, PA |
Welcome You do indded have talent Keep going...You can only get better from here |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
There's so much meaning in this one! Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Welcome to Passions Luke! Enjoyed your first post. Take a look around, read, post, have fun. Chris  "Said you'd give me light... |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Welcome to Passions, Luke. I was 13 when I started writing poetry. Then stopped when I was 18. I took many English classes, including poetry at middle and high school. Now I am 40 and just starting to write again. Don't stop writing. Let the words flow. Good first post. Patricia |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like knowing this is just the beginning. *S* Well done... and welcome! *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome, to your new family--poetic one that is!  I find this rather exciting that this is your first poem! You are starting out on the write, I mean "right" foot with this one! Knowing that this is the beginning for you, it is going to be fun to watch you grow as a poet! You're certainly off to a good start! Warm welcoming hugs, Earth Angel |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Enjoyed your first post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
welcome. I loved your poem. I'm Liz, I'm 14, and am...well a little weird At sunset I've won or lost. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Tell it to em straight liz. weirdaholics anonymous.  [This message has been edited by gemjop (07-10-2003 05:34 AM).] |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Luke, this is an excellent poem indeed, you have talent looking to be read, there will be a library of thoughts, which I am sure, will slowly find there ways through your pen, and may I ask, please share them all with us. I enjoyed this piece, well thought out and constructed. Thank you for sharing. If we start with death here, can we then follow the reborn through life and its journey? Sincerely Rick Take care and keep writing and showing your talent to us all. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Luke! Welcome to PIP! What a nice entrance . . . I dont see anything touchy about the questioning of life and death at all I think this was lovely xxoo |
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Jennis#1 Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 112IL, Usa |
Luke, Wecolme to PIP. Great poem. I'm Jenn, 17 and I love to write poems. I hope read more of your work. |
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LukeatNFFC Junior Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 42Nottingham, England |
Wow...great response to my work. Thank You. Ive written a couple more poems now...they're around here somewhere. But this is my first and my favourite. Its the only 1 where i think...That sounds OK! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome to the passion...h |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Luke. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Welcome. And your topic doesn't scare me. This is a bright place. The Sun(shine) is out!  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A terrific first poem/first post. Welcome Luke, it's great to have you here. Maree fate is not just |
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