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Ericc
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0 posted 2003-07-08 09:44 AM



There is an air of innocence
hanging close to your
lips -

It has the taste of eden
before the fall.

You see me...as if I stood in
the light of a thousand
brilliant moons.

This is what it's like to
be truly naked.

To be seen.

I close my eyes...leaning
to your lips.

And breathe the air
of eden.

© Copyright 2003 Eric P McCarty - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-07-08 09:46 AM



Sigh.

When will I ever learn?  

Patricia
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2 posted 2003-07-08 09:59 AM


You see me...as if I stood in
the light of a thousand
brilliant moons.

This is what it's like to
be truly naked.

To be seen.

Eric,
Yes...to be truly seen and accepted in love.
As always, an amazing write.

Patricia



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with you
3 posted 2003-07-08 10:22 AM


I got goose bumps reading this... and those yummy shivers lol always a wonderful read
Janet Marie
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4 posted 2003-07-08 10:48 AM


There is an air of innocence
hanging close to your
lips -

It has the taste of eden
before the fall.

You see me...as if I stood in
the light of a thousand
brilliant moons.

This is what it's like to
be truly naked.


============================

damn.............................
whew ............................
sigh ............................

you take succintity to new heights........
outstanding depth of expression using less as more.
very cool ... very well done poet sir.

gemjop
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5 posted 2003-07-08 10:54 AM


You see me...as if I stood in
the light of a thousand
brilliant moons

You just have it dont ya eh? how do you do it? I felt this, under my skin. so, its going in my library.

gemjop
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6 posted 2003-07-08 10:55 AM


was so excited, i forgot to add. keep doing this, its becoming a habit. grrrr

Sunkissed
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7 posted 2003-07-08 10:57 AM


Words that whisper soft as a kiss...


Lovely.

Sunkissed.

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2003-07-08 03:54 PM


A nice way to put it...James
Margherita
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Eternity
9 posted 2003-07-08 05:49 PM


There is an air of sweet mystery
reaching out from these pages
envelopping me in beauty ...

Put your hands over my eyes
your light shines so bright
and makes me blind
... oh, it's too late.

A thousand brilliant moons
challenge the Sun ...
fusion is the solution.
Light to light ..

At light speed
we return to Eden,
to innocence ...

Dear Eric, your words open the gates to divine realms ...

Love and hugs. Margherita


S Arthur Grey
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woven by a poet's loom
10 posted 2003-07-08 06:56 PM


Oh, lucky you!

And a nice write, too.

s.a.g.

Sunshine
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11 posted 2003-07-08 06:58 PM



Ok...I'm a sucker
for a sigh.

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-07-08 07:00 PM


You see me...as if I stood in
the light of a thousand
brilliant moons.

This is what it's like to
be truly naked.

To be seen.


And, Eric...
what really makes it good is when we are loved no matter what...even after we are seen.  
Hugs  
Ethel


scorpio
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right...there
13 posted 2003-07-08 07:02 PM


A wonderfully romantic poem,Eric..

believe in what your heart feels...

cinnamongirl
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14 posted 2003-07-09 08:26 AM


Aaaahhh... this is so beautiful, so delicate in love, so strong in passion, so open and honest and True... a letting go of the ego, standing naked and yet fully comfortable in the brilliant Light of Love.

Profound in its wisdom, brilliant in its beauty, overflowing with delicious sensuality and love.

Thank you, my beloved poet, for sharing...

I love you,
Moca

AnamCara
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since 2003-06-25
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Canada
15 posted 2003-07-09 10:45 AM


a thousand shadows cover over you

yet

I still see you shining
as the moon itself.

You are not poetry alone
this is the surface

You are pure love
reaching far
...caressing me
deep
down
inside

Love,
Angela

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
16 posted 2003-07-09 08:19 PM


Applauding here...wonderful write
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