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Listen......It's A Different Sound..........(TY Local Rebel)
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Listen......It's A Different Sound..........(TY Local Rebel) |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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Listen liiiissssteeeen I heard a sound I heard a sound a sound I heard a soooounnnnndddddddd I heard a sound In the night I heard a sound in the night A different sound I heard a different sound in the night I heard a sound in the night that did not sound just right I heard a sound in the night that did not sound just right it was different a sound in the night that did not sound just right it was different it was different dif---fe---rent The different sound I heard heard the sound in the night in the night the different sound I heard in the night that did not sound just right the different sound I HEARD in the night that did not sound just right was my dog snoring snoor---ri---inggggg and I listened lissssssssteneddddddd . . . . . This is a completely new way of writing, but I like Local Rebel's writing this way so much, (though his is much, much better, of course) that I wanted to try. This is the second one I've tried this way. It's fun.  [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-07-2003 12:20 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Very clever, very cute, and very entertaining!  Linda |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
eeeeeeeeeee i love it!  i really do! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Linda and Gemma. As I said, this is only the second one I've tried like this, but Local Rebel's poems that he writes this way were so interesting, I wanted to try them with a simple theme. I'm glad that ya'll liked my little experiment. Hugs to you both Ethel |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very creative! You did a great job. Eric |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very clever Ethel...love the format!! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I thought it was going to be something like the sound of a heart beating. But that was just too much!!! I can't stop laughing I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Eric, thank you. I'm really glad that you liked it.  . . Nancy, thanks Lady. It sure is different for me. LOL But I like that style of writing. . . Liz, LOL I'm glad that you liked it. It was fun writing it. . . Hugs to you all Ethel |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I like the style loved the end |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
he is quite the inspiration, ain't he? cute write Ethel, a good change |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, I'm glad that you liked it. I thought you might. . . Dixie, he can write, can't he? . . "If I know there's no possible way I can change something or do about something, then I push it to the back room in my mind & slam the door on it" ~Gary~ ~Heart hugs to you from me~ Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-07-2003 02:54 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ethel: I LOVE this . . . . nice to see a new you indeed keep em coming please . . . this is awesome xxoo |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
you've certainly given it a new twist --- a different sound even  if you want to get more complex with it try to imagine a southern evangelical preacher as you write it -- it will write itself then...  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Sue. LOL I do like this style. HeeHee!! Glad that you did, too. . . Local Reb, I think I can do that. LOL I certainly have heard a lot of them in my life time. But, come to think of it, the devil might really come out of me if I write about that!! . . "If I know there's no possible way I can change something or do about something, then I push it to the back room in my mind & slam the door on it." ~Gary~ ~Heart hugs to you from me~ Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-07-2003 03:01 PM).] |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Ethel, this is fascinating and I really enjoyed reading and re-reading it! Great job ... hugs, Marti |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Marti. I'm glad that you liked it. It sure is a lot different for me. LOL "If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked this  |
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